I love that the chapters are short & sweet for easier reads. & Your main character is really strong. Great job so far. Adding to my library to read more later
Well all in all i have to say i love it..I thought it was an excellent start :) *And don't forget to smile :)"
Liked the first chapter. It's not very long, but it certainly tells you there's more to come. I told myself I wouldn't get caught up in another book . . .
It's good, but needs some more details. It's better if you indent each paragraph. Other than that, great job! =D
I would actually like to know more about the characters in the beginning.. kinda like put a background to it :)) otherwise this chapter is really good <3
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