This is awesome...i also believe in GOD so i would like to continue your story....cool we are both 14 year olds and im not good in grammar either:p
I love the way you described the day as soon as the prologue begun. I also like how un-ordinarily realistic your characters seem to be. :D
Wow best story yet on this website :) I love it, really excited to read more! <3Allie
The idea was nice, but I do think you need to edit this a bit. It seems monotonous when you keep on going like I...something then I..something else.
really liked the flow.. short yet concise.. captures the reader's attention.. I wonder what happened in their house..?? *off to next chapter!*
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