The Elemental Power

6 Part Story 705 Reads 22 Votes
David Cairns By DavidCairns Updated 3 years ago
What happen's when the power of the elements can be controlled?
I thought it was really interesting:) u had a few errors with the "i's" and a couple in the third paragraph but other than that I can't wait till u post more:)
@DavidCairns sure thing! :) just a moment and I'll pm you my email address so you can send it :)
yeah, you need to work on punctuation.  It reads really scrambled. Also you tend to be repetitive.  Just a bit more editing.  Also use shorter sentences.  Anyway, you have an orphan.  What is the problem he is facing?