Beautiful Tragedy

8 Part Story 830 Reads 59 Votes
MeghanChristine By MeghanChristine Updated 3 years ago
Hailey Gabriel Trinity Christine Bauer (and yes that is her whole name) has had a rough past and now that yet another thing has gone wrong in her life, her three brothers drag her from California to New Jersey. She hasn’t seen Jersey since she was seven and she’s not sure she’s ready to go back yet. Will things get better or will they get worse? Those secrets about her past that have been locked up can come out at any time and they may come out sooner rather than later.
I freakin' like the name. And, i definitely understand your character for not liking her name. I got a long name too. And longer! Hahaha. Anyways, interesting prologue. You seem to excel in writing in first person POV and it's good that you're using it here. Good luck!
Good prologue. It does not give too much away and makes you want to read on to find out why they have to move. I like your descriptions and the way you have written your dialogue. And your chapter flows smoothly : ) BTW, Is Hailey diabetic?
That is really really good! Keep writing! I love the story and can't wait to see where you go with it <3
Lol, how she just randomly nicknamed him. Cute ;) 
                                    Very nice written, really. :) 
                                    Hopefully, in the future you'll get more reads 'cause this is a pretty nice story to be reading. :) I'll be keeping an eye on this story. :)
Hmm, interesting, I mean, yeah I'm a bit confused at why she's moving, but this IS the prologue, you know so I guess I'll be okay. :)
It's very well written, and I love the little nicknames!  Voted. <3