its very interesting. i'll be waiting for the release of the next chapter then :D
there are very few mistakes in there and it really got me curious!in short-its Amazing!
This is cool! Dude I really like the but when the brother said what are you stoning there for do you mean what are you standing there for?
This is good, you never rush the plot and I love this fact. :)
No grammar mistakes and all. Overall, it's good. :)
Keep up the good work!
Thanks for the dedication. I hope this time, this story really works out for you!
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