Beila (1812)

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SleepyZombie33 By SleepyZombie33 Updated 3 years ago
*Historical Fiction, 1812* 

A series of letters addressed to Beila, written by her father, who is a French soldier during Napoleon's invasion of Russia. He retells his experiences to her. 

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Writers Note: Just and idea that came into my head, the two characters (Beila, and Jacques) are fictional. Each chapter is relatively short, but that's the way I want it to be. I apologize for any historical inaccuracies.
Oh the optomism of the beginning of war. I like this concept it's very original and intriguing. My only note would be the part where he describes his own daughter to herself seems a bit awkward but otherwise I got a good sense of how he must feel leaving his girls behind.
This is beautiful so far. It's unfinished, I hope? The only typo/error I noticed was in the first paragraph: "your sister's" should be "your sisters." That was the only mistake that jumped at me. I'll be adding this to my library for updates :)
i could feel his emotions through this letter. i feel bad for the guy. really good job the history part is really good. i actually enjoy reading history novels
wow very nicely written. it feels as if it is a real letter written from back then. good job on this one
Beautifully written, so believable with all the right use of words and structure. Your knowledge of when and where things happened also adds to the story.
Again, I like how you conveyed the emotions he is feeling and you furthered them by sharing a memory he has of the girls. Will all the chapters be in the form of a letter? Just make sure you don't make it repetitive, like don't explain similar stuff in each letter.