I think its well written and i loved all of it xept the last three lines ddnt flow as well. Other than that it ryhmed perfectly and is an inspiring poem:)
This is really sweet :D I can never get things to rhyme or have flow but you do it so well!! Omg I love it..
@AutumnThorn no problem. can you read mines too? and tell me what you think of it? :)
I love this one! (I'll comment on the forum as well!). Coud you send me this one through email? (firstname.lastname@example.org).
set your mind free. screw society. don't be a zombie. ~ gotta love that part. it's moving.
Wow, this is great! It has a message that is definitely to keep..I love the "Talk to your heart" Part:) Voted!
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