This is a really great idea, and I love the story so far! Great job; I can't wait to read on! :)
Wow :) this is great! A really interesting idea and I am excited to read more. You are a really great writer!
I really like the structure of your story and the sescriptions :D Keep Writing!!!
Aw... such a sad world they live in. You have a good skill as a writer, nice job!! :)
It's really good! I can't wait to see how Marissa escapes and if her new friends are coming along with her :)
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