I really like your consistency in paragraph size! :) And the fact that it isn't all just people talking, you have descriptions, etc. Great job!
this is still a fantastic story. Nice work, Joan! and thanks for the dedication ;)
I think your writing style is really good and i have to say that this story is not what expected. Its good though and i like the plot. Nice job :)
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