God this first chapter sounds like my every morning ;) jkes but seriously good storie
Great dialogue, strong descriptions that fit the characters perfectly. I especially liked your first chapter. ;D
I like the overall writing but as 'iPostStroies' commented, some of the info seems a little off. Either way, good luck and keep writing!
Diaglogue is great. Relationship between characters is good. Well done! Adding to my library.
I loved the friendship relationship , i could really relate to it . I think this is really good, and i can see myself reading it :D
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