In need of some critiquing for you New story, here is the place for you.

Here's mine! don't worry it's only 2 chapters so far, snd they're short!:D

Wattpad: A popular ebook website, or otherwise known as: The way to Rebecca Hewitt's heart. James Cavern has been madly in love with his best friend Rebecca Hewitt for as long as he can remember, but, as all these stories go, she doesn't feel the same way. Rebecca being addicted to Wattpad, James decides to pose as a stranger and reintroduce himself to her on Wattpad in hopes of winning her heart. Read on to find out what happens between James and Rebecca. Will she fall for him? Will he tell her the truth? All the answers are just a click away!

http://www.wattpad.com/story/1545401-from-wattpad-with-love

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It's a Larry fan fic, just a warning. It's only 3 pages long so far. Thank you! :) xx http://www.wattpad.com/story/1618268-get-back

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@IceCreamLovers_Unite You could just read a chapter or two. I wouldn't mind. :D

http://www.wattpad.com/story/1251791-the-lost-dreamer-watty-awards-2012

When fifteen-year-old Eden Paris discovers that not only is she not human but rather, a descendant of gods and angels, a demiangel, she is plunged into the world of the Ethereal Society, a society of the higher half-bloods.

Eden is determined to sever herself from the world she thought only existed in books and fairytales but it seems that the only way to get out of the mess her Scent caused her was to tie herself to the handsome yet intolerable and haughty young William Sage as his Consor, a warrior sworn by blood and soul to protect his other to death.

Something stirs outside of the protective barrier of the Sanctuary. More and more demiangels have been reported kidnapped and hadn't been discovered nor heard from anyone. When Eden learns that her best friend is in grave danger, she is drawn deeper into the secrets of the Hidden World.

In this adventure packed novel, Eden learns that some things are rather much better off hidden under the covers of her books.

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http://www.wattpad.com/story/1525582-what-about-love

Everyone wants to get noticed. Everyone wants to be someone. So does Susan Parker. But she doesn't know the way.(FOR NOW) She is seventeen ,she lives in Seattle and she's not that popular. Peter Daves ,her crush (for almost ten years) ingores her. The only one who is next to her when she really needs it it's her friend, Maggy, who has been there for her for almost seventeen years.(or not?) Her sister and father died three years ago, in 2009. After their death her life is falling apart. Her mother is going crazy. She needs to be loved. She is searching for love ,but in the end she finds out that being good looking is the only way to be loved and accepted by her classmates. But she hasn't searched enough... Someone is going to change her whole life and make others see *UNDER THE COVER , WHERE THE REAL BEAUTY IS HIDDEN...*

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@IceCreamLovers_Unite It's a fanfiction, so idk if you'll be able to understand it without being familiar with the avatar/legend of korra and naruto worlds, but...criticism appreciated! I'm worried its OOC or boring -.-" http://www.wattpad.com/story/1591277-gaara-and-toph thanks!

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http://www.wattpad.com/story/1175197-child-of-thorns

Its a five page opening chapter but the other chapters are much shorter

Hope you like it :D

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You don't have to read it all if you think it's too long :-)

http://www.wattpad.com/story/1469248-broken-wings

~ Hero.

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http://www.wattpad.com/story/1310621-love-is-a-journey-not-a-destination

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I only have a 1 page prologue up, so could you read that :)

Thanks

http://www.wattpad.com/story/1594532-darkest-desires

Cleo Waters had her life planned out. In Coldwater Bay, nothing bad ever happens so she never imagined that her life plans would get stopped so abruptly. Suddenly, she has a deadly killer stalking her with a string of murders behind him. The police want to take her into their protection but will a visit from the only surviving victim of the murderer cause her to run for a life or stay with a chance of living or dying?

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Here's mine :D THANKS FOR READING IF YOU DO :]

LINK:http://www.wattpad.com/story/1051281-chapter-one

Summary: Kayla was a girl that gets along with everyone but ever since that traumatizing day in 8th grade she has kept her heart locked. now in high school she still has kept her heart locked and only her bestie Alana who she grew up with knows why she kept it locked. Kayla is the type of girl that hides her true self by acting as a nerd in school but outside of school she is a whole new different person. she has luscious brown flowing hair down to her chest but she puts it in braids in school. she has one brown eye and a green one but covers up the green one with brown contacts. once she meets Ethan he gives her a new perspective of how she should look at herself. will Ethan be able to gradually unlock Kayla's heart or will she keep it locked forever.

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i love your story. it is genius. :) @Vico96

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http://www.wattpad.com/story/1603953-hunt-those-bitches-down should i countinue with writing this story?

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@IceCreamLovers_Unite my story has only one chapter so far, please feel free to critique it honestly. :)

Bailee Roberts is a pretty, rich, happy-go-lucky, down-to-earth kind of girl. Then came the day she was caught in a horrible situation. She comes to school with scars and bruises all over her once beautiful face and body. She becomes an outsider, where she discovers how it feels to be alone. Truthfully, she's not totally alone. She still has her best friends, Annie and Jasper, with her, and this boy she met at some hotel on a vacation.

How far will Bailee go to get his attention?

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I also have another one, which is three chapters up :)

Enrolled in an International Boarding School in America, Julian Rios, a Hispanic daredevil, easily snatches the attention of all the girls he talks to. With his style and swagger, who could resist?

Allison Shaw, half-Filipina, half-American, is on her second year in the school. She is a complete badass yet straight A student, just like Julian.

The school has finally allowed the students to make and join clubs, and for some idiotic reason, someone decided to start The Kissing Club, a club for experienced kissers, and not-so-experienced kissers. Neither Julian nor Allison plan on joining the club, but will their friends be able to compel them in? But in the end, they both discover something that would break them, and their relationship.

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Hi! First of all, thank you so much for doing this! It really helps your fellow writers, and I really do appreciate it. :) Okay, so my story is entitled "The Memoir Man". I know the plot may seem a bit confusing, but please tell me if you are completely and totally lost! I'm still fine tuning the plot. Thank you again, I appreciate this so much!

http://www.wattpad.com/story/918337-the-memoir-man

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http://www.wattpad.com/5575121-decoding-program-boys it's about a page long.

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http://www.wattpad.com/story/1611536-last-chance

Riley Chance made some bad decisions, bad decisions that could put her away for a long time. Fortunately, the CIA is willing to sweep the whole thing under the rug. Unfortunately, they want her to go on a mission in return. Anything the CIA is involved in is bound to be dangerous. Riley got a second chance...it might be her last

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Plz critique all the chapters.. Looking forward to some pieces of advice from you.. :)

Title~DREAMS.. Link~http://www.wattpad.com/story/1517304-dreams Genre~Fan fiction.. Description~"What’s your dream?" he asked me, looking deep into my eyes. "My dream is to have a heaven with the one by my side, the one who I love and the one who loves me, the one who protects me, the one who stands by me through thick and thin. But I don't think it's ever gonna come true." I chuckled softly. Me and my crazy dreams. "If you don't believe your dreams, how can others?" he smiled. "Do you believe in your dream?" "A little..." I replied honestly. "You know... I'm gonna help until you get Cassy back. Love means everything to me," I said, smiling. "You're amazing." he complimented me, looking deep into my eyes... deeper than ever. Was I falling in love? No...of course not. No! Cover~

Hope to here from you soon ~ Munazza Bangash

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@IceCreamLovers_Unite SHORT STORY entered for Watty Awards 2012 so comments & votes are appreciated :)

You know that girl you called fat? She’s been starving herself for God knows how long.

You know that chick you called emo? She’s been battling depression for years.

You know that gal you bullied and whenever she would cry you would say “Aww is little Missy going to go cry to her mommy and daddy?” Her parents died a couple years ago and she’s still grieving their death.

The tiniest thing can hurt a person beyond words, but it can also shed light to a dark tunnel. This is Missy Vega’s story about loss, hurt, betrayal and hope.

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http://www.wattpad.com/story/1540425-the-last-hunt

Life is good for Ruin. It was a small pack, but the best Hunters around. Tensions ran high, and the pack went from three to two, and if that wasn't enough someone was killing all of the best Shifters... The Hunt is on, but who is the hunter...and who is being hunted?

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ww.wattpad.com/5715950-the-emperors-wolves-gathering-the-wolfpack

Hi would you mind giving mine the once over please.

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@IceCreamLovers_Unite COMMENT ON THE 13TH CHAPTER PLEASE

http://www.wattpad.com/5058636-straight-in-a-crooked-world

The world as we see it...or maybe it should be the gays as we see them! In a world where the population is prominently gay heterosexuality can cause conflicts. It did for these two! A nobody at Solae High - Jason suddenly finds himself the center of unwanted attention when the people of his world find out his preference! Unbeknownst pulled to an old friend- Ashlia and her to him...these to find themselves against the world of homosexuals. As if life was easy with Mason bullying Jason to no ends he now had to suffer the scrutiny of his friends and classmates for choosing someone inappropriate? But was it really? Pushed against a wall with no way to escape these two teenagers stand to fight back for the person they love and who love them back just the same...but will they succeed?

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Could you please check out my story? Just click the picture below please, Thanks in advance

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http://www.wattpad.com/story/853975-2313-a-d

The year is 2313 A.D. and 14-year-old Avery Schultz has escaped the war-stricken United States for a new life in Germany. Everything seems safe for now, but can young Avery learn to cope with the memories she's tried so hard to forget? Or can some thing's be too traumatizing to leave behind? Meanwhile, the Prirodan Military reigns control over half the world, terrorizing gays, lesbians, other religions, and anything else that's condemned in their "Book of Love."

Thank you!

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http://www.wattpad.com/story/1653378-flight

In a world full of people different from herself, Elizabet just wants to explore and go on adventures - not stay cooped up at home and get married to some rich man. When her parent's abuse becomes too much to handle and a forced marriage looms on the horizon, her only option is to escape; but before long her flight finds her lost in a strange caravan and wrapped up in a world - and fight - bigger than her. Was home really the safest place after all?

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http://www.wattpad.com/story/1681392-jailbirds

Thomas Prescott is caught with Audrey's drugs and put in jail. He meets people there. People called Jailbirds. They teach him and he becomes a little better as a person than before.

It says rated R, but wattpad is being stupid. I personally wouldn't consider it R, but probably because it's about drugs and there is swearing. Seriously though, it's much less graphic than most of the stories on here nowadays.

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