Critiques/ Reads COME HERE !!!!!!! I Will Read Your Stories!!!!!!!!!! [open]


  • BraveNewWriter
    BraveNewWriter
    1 year ago

    ...oopss keyboard malfunction

    @gotFAITH12 I left your critique on your story - it should all be there :))

    @meKEZI Done:)

    And, going onto others. Sorry it took me so long ~ school >.<

    @Barbzzy The link to my story is up in the first post :))

  • ChaeWinacott
    ChaeWinacott
    1 year ago

    http://www.wattpad.com/story/1281206-devoured-destiny

    He's one pissed off creature. "What did you do that for?! I could have died! YOUR NUTS!" "But unfortunately, you are not dead. Why is that; my little gem?...You look like a human, and you smell like a human..." He brings his nose right up to my ear. My hairs are up on end, sending unwanted shivers throughout my body. "...And you certainly feel like a human girl..." Jones trails off while he torments me by caressing the side of my cheek with his long finger. The only thing I can do is remain still. The boy on the Willow had warned me not to take off without him. I should have listened. Curiosity. What a bitch. ******************************************************************************************************** A story of stubborn love, reincarnation, and unseen majestical lands, OH and VAMPIRES. Ariel is a teenage girl, who is always over analyzing life. She has questions about everything. She is also told that she is a part of a different species of vampires. So she finds herself quickly questioning her insanity quite a lot after she is brought into an unknown land, meets a mysterious, handsome boy; and is told that she and him are the key to saving thousands of souls. She finds herself giving in, and she starts her journey. What she doesn't realize is that, this is not the first time she has begun this journey; Nor is it the second.

  • ii4oo49
    ii4oo49
    1 year ago

    http://www.wattpad.com/story/1358278-evanescence The Beauty: Rose Moreau has always been kind and gentle, but with years of physical and mental abuse from her father she has also learned how to become strong. Belle, her younger sister, is obsessed with the idea of a vampire whisking her away in the night and making her immortal. However, vampires and immorality come at a high price and Belle will do whatever it takes to become what she most desires. Though, Rose will risk everything she has to keep her little sister from this fate. The Beast: Antony Petrov has been haunted by the past memories of the woman he once loved. His heart hardened the moment she was taken from this world and has only coarsened through the years and leaving nothing but an empty shell filled with hatred towards the world and humans specifically. The Evanescence: When two different worlds collide, danger stirs for both them. Unexplainable events begin to occur both of them question everything including each other. Are they strong enough to withhold the danger? Or will they simply be like the evanescence of the morning mist and simply fade away?

  • TalgaSlayer
    TalgaSlayer
    1 year ago

    @BraveNewWriter Chapter 1 of my fantasy, Blood Sacrifice. Has plenty of monsters, epic battlescenes, evil overlords and romance

    Monsters are rising in unnatural numbers and all seem to working according to a master plan. Valedoria and Grathol are locked in the deadly embrace of war. Loyalty, Betrayal and Sacrifice are all themes in this action packed novel. Only one man can stop the evil plot that will endanger the whole world. Garrick Calder doesn't seem quite up to it however.

    http://www.wattpad.com/4619044-blood-sacrifice-chapter-1-close-call

    Off to yours :)

  • BraveNewWriter
    BraveNewWriter
    1 year ago

    @TheReal_Charmander @WeAreAHurricane Done :D And ready for more :)

  • _erinscarr
    _erinscarr
    1 year ago

    @Andreaxo Here's mine. :)

    http://www.wattpad.com/story/1340957-till-death-does-its-part

    Kim Book cover

    It's one thing to witness the one you love die. It's another to be the one responsible for it. When Mara Farren found out she's the death angel assigned to disconnect Travis Taylor's soul from his body, she ran away and hid herself to keep him alive. But not sending the soul to Purgatory is forbidden to angels of the Ninth Order. So to cover up, she sent Travis' dad's soul instead. Believing she saved him from death, and everything will go back to how it was, she went back to live her disguised human life. But every decision made has its own consequence. She'll find out that the soul she saved can be the very soul that will kill her. Till does its Part is the tale of love, sacrifice and death.

    Give it a try, Thanks. :)

  • MusicIsMySoul
    MusicIsMySoul
    1 year ago

    @BraveNewWriter Hey off to yours now :) Hope you enjoy this! :)

    http://www.wattpad.com/story/673631-the-urbem-completed

    Inferior and Subservient. That’s the words they used over 3,000 years ago when asked to describe a woman; well, reader, let me tell you that things have changed quite a bit. Enter a worldwide revolution, 3,000 years of judgment, and two rebellious girls whose lives were forced together by a twist of fate. When men are nothing and women are everything, will two unlikely heroines be able to fight against it all and save the endangered species of man?

  • AnonymousScorpio
    AnonymousScorpio
    1 year ago

    The Tales Of An Overweight Girl

    By: AnonymousScorpio

    http://www.wattpad.com/story/1354388-the-tales-of-an-overweight-girl

    Yeslynn Marie is you average overweight teen, find out what she goes through on a regular basis. She might even fall for somebody along the way.

    Thanks,

    AnonymousScorpio

  • BraveNewWriter
    BraveNewWriter
    1 year ago

    @AnonymousScorpio @MusicIsMySoul @TalgaSlayer \ Finished :))

    Feel free to keep them coming :D

  • writersaddiction
    writersaddiction
    1 year ago

    Hey! I really want some feedback on my short story The 11 Victims. It’s kind of a horror story and I’m new to writing horror stories. It won’t take long to read! I would really appreciate it if you could check it out! Please comment and if you like it please vote!! Thanks <3 Alice. http://www.wattpad.com/4774507-the-11-victims-a-short-story?d=ud

  • MusicIsMySoul
    MusicIsMySoul
    1 year ago

    @BraveNewWriter Thanks so much! We'll get to fixing those errors asap :D Its amazing all the small things you miss despite how many times you read it :P

  • _SilentSongbirds
    _SilentSongbirds
    1 year ago

    @BraveNewWriter Going To Yours Now :)

    This One's For That Girl - http://www.wattpad.com/story/1394058-this-one%27s-for-that-girl

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    "You never know what you have until you lose it." -Unknown;; Brooke Galdbotch has always been a quiet girl. Her best friend, Caleb, pronouced his love for her when she was at the young age of twelve. Shortly after he turned seventeen, he was offered a record deal with his band. Fulfilling his words, he announced to her he was leaving for Hollywood the day of. Kissing her for the last time in who knows how long, he said goodbye, got in his van and left. He promised her he'd be back. Brooke, now being nineteen, believes that he's forgotten about her. But, will hearing him over the radio, speaking of coming back to Bedford, Virginia to keep his promise to her change her mind? Can she really believe that he's loved her after all this time?

  • -shayla-
    -shayla-
    1 year ago

    @BraveNewWriter I'm off to yours. :D Here's my humor and teen fiction story. :D

    http://www.wattpad.com/4655763-ours-chapter-one

  • xolglraph11x
    xolglraph11x
    1 year ago

    Hi. Am relatively new to wattpad. I would love for you or -anybody for that matter- to to check out my story and give me some feedback, http://wattpad.com/xolglraph11x http://www.wattpad.com/4665775-it-takes-two-to-play-this-game-watty-awards-2012# . I would love to return the favor also if you like.

  • xolglraph11x
    xolglraph11x
    1 year ago

    It Takes Two To Play This Game - Watty Awards 2012

    Jessica and Victoria Bayne are twins. But apart from sharing the same birthday and parents they have nothing in common. Matt, Vicki's boyfriend is cynical, arrogant and rude while Luke, Jessie's is fun loving, thoughtful and great to be around. what will happen when the four gets together? Can their relationships survive? Read on to find outhttp://www.wattpad.com/story/1367632-it-takes-two-to-play-this-game-watty-awards-2012#

  • BraveNewWriter
    BraveNewWriter
    1 year ago

    @MusicIsMySoul Haha no problem. I do the exact same thing all the time XD I'll look back at something I haven't looked at in awhile and go "WHAT WAS I THINKING ???!!" because of all the errors I missed. It's always hard when you're looking at your own writing :/ Finding nitpicky details in other people's writing..pshh that's easy, haha :)

  • BraveNewWriter
    BraveNewWriter
    1 year ago

    @xolglraph11x Haha, of course! Just give me an indication that you've gone to mine and I'll get started on yours right away (...well as soon as I finish with the others before you).

  • _xcrazyanimalx
    _xcrazyanimalx
    1 year ago
  • _xcrazyanimalx
    _xcrazyanimalx
    1 year ago
  • _LexiIsMyName
    _LexiIsMyName
    1 year ago

    @BraveNewWriter MY BEST FRIEND JESSE

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    Justice Grendler is your average teenage girl leading a completely ordinary lifestyle. She’s a junior in high school with a few close friends to keep her social needs fulfilled, but just like most everyone else, she has that one friend that means more to her than anything or anyone else in the world. Her best friend, Jesse. Justice and Jesse, raised together through close family relations, have been inseparable since childhood. And nothing romantic or awkward has ever come into play between them in all the seventeen years of their lives spent together… Until Justice finds herself falling head-over-heels in love with Jesse. That's when everything changes…

  • BraveNewWriter
    BraveNewWriter
    1 year ago

    @Desiii @ShayMae13 @xolglraph11x Hey guys - sorry I haven't got to you yet. I literally just got home, so I'll start on you all right away :)

  • BraveNewWriter
    BraveNewWriter
    1 year ago

    @Desiii @ShayMae13 @xolglraph11x Done :)! And, ready for more because it's officially SUMMER :D

  • SundaySundae
    SundaySundae
    1 year ago

    @BraveNewWriter heading to your story now :3

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  • LuccexFrey
    LuccexFrey
    1 year ago

    @BraveNewWriter Hi! I have two stories and it would be really cool if you can check either of the two, even greater if you can try both. :)

    http://www.wattpad.com/story/1311158-she-and-him Lucce's starting her senior year with a disinterested mindset. Unlike the whole lot in Lincoln High who's all about the prom and football, she's simply content with staying by the sidelines with her new bestfriend, Aerith, and her beloved camera on hand. She also swore off boys after being dumped by her ex-boyfriend for her ex-bff the previous year. It's supposed to be an uneventful last year of high school for her. That is until Adam Hawthorne, a hotshot actor who got his first break two years prior after being cast as the always-shirtless-with-chocolate-abs-to-die-for guy in that popular fantasy martial arts flick, started going to Lincoln High as well.

    http://www.wattpad.com/story/1395841-creating-mr-perfect Kate Roberts hate being told to find ‘The One’, especially after failing to meet at least one that can even be called ‘The One Maybe’. That is until she buys a little purple book that promises her of exactly what she wants. Could she really create the perfect guy for her?

  • _simplyawesome
    _simplyawesome
    1 year ago

    Audrey's life didn't go well as she planned it to be. First, her father left her and her mom to be with another woman. Second, her mom got depressed and soon passed away due to some illness. Third, she doesn't know what she really feels for two extremely different gentleman; her best friend and a one-of-a-kind guy. And lastly, count TEN to ONE... something unexpected will happen.