Need a critique? I'll do it for free!

Hi! I'm really bored, so I'll critique for free! Just leave a link to your story. Descriptions are optional. I'll read anything but poems (sorry l'm not very good at writing them, so l probably shouldn't critique them.) l should have a critique to you right after l finish reading. l hope l can help! :D

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@PinkAngel22 Here's the link: http://www.wattpad.com/story/1266235-daddy%27s-little-mutant-watty-awards-2012 Thanks so much! I could use some criticism.

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I never turn down a free critique :)

http://www.wattpad.com/story/1100835-memoirs-of-a-fallen-god

Thanks for offering!

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@Steel3legance l really liked your story! Positives: Everything was great! l didn't see a whole ton of spelling mistakes, which is awesome! Negatives: nothing really. sorry, this was really bothering me. Edit: His mouth opened as if to speak, and then closed it, his words hiding in his mouth. (either add: and then HE closed it or change: his mouth opened as if to speak to he opened his mouth as if to speak) awesome story, l hope you update soon! :D

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@PinkAngel22

http://www.wattpad.com/story/962211-little-n-large-watty-awards-2012

Romance/Humor!

Nicole Crystal Welsh is starting her sophomore year at her California performing Arts school with the best social status possible- a floater. Someone popular enough to hang with the popular crowd yet still have the ability to sit with newbies or freshmen. In a place where looks are everything Nicole is beyond satisfied with her position when the inevitable happens- girl meets boy. Floaters are usually loners but Nicole is popular enough to make it work, that's not the issue. The problem is Caleb is a whopping 5'6 and Nicole is 6'1. In a place where looks are everything Nicole must find the strength to break the cookie cutter mold or lose everything she's ever worked for with a few bumps along the way.

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http://www.wattpad.com/story/779113-the-new-ginger-in-school

Thanks so much for offering!

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I'd really appreciate your thoughts on my new Watty Awards story. It's rather long, so feel free to just tackle the first few chapters. Thanks!

http://www.wattpad.com/story/1272872-snowed-watty-awards-2012

"The future North America has a way of cleaning out its least successful plebeians--by taking their money, then their lives. A strange entrepreneur with an unearthly talent for marksmanship offers his clients a timelier means of escape."

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http://www.wattpad.com/4177417-dragonsang

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http://www.wattpad.com/story/1285863-sugar-babe

Only a page long! @PinkAngel22

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Thank you http://www.wattpad.com/1898269-the-hidden-intent-revised-chapter-1

@PinkAngel22

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http://www.wattpad.com/story/1053656-the-blade-and-wing TYYY ALOT..=P=P@PinkAngel22

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Title: Transparent

Genre: Romance, Fantasy, Teen Fiction, Humor, Highschool Setting

Description: If you die partly because of love, will you entirely give it up? Catherine, aged 16, died and lost her own. But despite that, she was given one more shot at life and at love. Without a second glance or thought over the matter, she took up that chance and never will she let it go, like how she let go her first and only love in her previous life.

Reborn as Zayne Willows: Follow her, as she strives to find out the truths behind her 'accidental' death, face the most heartbreaking of betrayals, and most entirely, make her one and only Asher fall for her again.

Click to read!

Please critique mine. :") I'll greatly appreciate it! <3

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http://www.wattpad.com/story/1048665-rules-were-made-to-be-broken Thank you so much! :)

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here is mine: http://www.wattpad.com/story/1271511-the-return-of-the-legend

thank you very much :D

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I'm just starting my story. So far I have 2 chapters. I really want to win the contest so I'm open to every opinion and criticism to help my story. http://www.wattpad.com/story/1273190-amboy-watty-awards-2012 Thank you for your time. :)

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http://www.wattpad.com/story/1187408-to-take-a-life-watty-2012

This is only just started, but if you could give me your honest opinion, I'd appreciate it :)

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@PinkAngel22

Hi! So, here are my stories. I hope you could check at least two of my stories.

*Title: Just another SUPERHERO story Genre: teen fiction, fan fiction, romance, comedy

Link: http://www.wattpad.com/4220148-just-another-superhero-story

For all the SUPERHEROES out there! 'Nuff said.

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*Title: Brielle and Gab Genre: teen fiction, romance

Link: http://www.wattpad.com/2895151-brielle-and-gab

A love story between a witch and a young boy.

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*Title: Children of Death and the Monsters of the Unwanted Genre: Fantasy, romance, action

Link: http://www.wattpad.com/2823887-children-of-death-and-the-monsters-of-the-unwanted

"The fate of the world lies in us." -Julianna Jackson

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Thanks! :* -ArtemisGrayson

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http://www.wattpad.com/story/1101779-love%27s-beat

Hello there! I hope you'll can find a slot in your schedule to check out my story, Love's Beat. Feel free to be as blunt as you want, honest opinions are more than welcomed! Thanks a heap! <3 :D

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http://www.wattpad.com/story/1251791-the-lost-dreamer

When fifteen-year-old Eden Paris discovers that not only is she not human but rather, a descendant of gods and angels, a demiangel, she is plunged into the world of the Ethereal Society, a society of the higher half-bloods. Eden is determined to sever herself from the world she thought only existed in books and fairytales but it seems that the only way to get out of the mess her Scent caused her was to tie herself to the handsome yet intolerable and haughty young William Sage as his Consor, a warrior sworn by blood and soul to protect his other to death. Something stirs outside of the protective barrier of the Sanctuary. More and more demiangels have been reported kidnapped and hadn't been discovered nor heard from anyone. When Eden learns that her best friend is in grave danger, she is drawn deeper into the secrets of the Hidden World. In this adventure packed novel, Eden learns that some things are rather much better off hidden under the covers of her books.

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@Tiye13 l really like the diolague and your prologue was amazing! is your whole first page your prologue? you had a lot of spelling mistakes so you might want to read through it and fix them. you may want to add some descriptions about other people besides nicole. other than that l really liked it and l plan to read more :D

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http://www.wattpad.com/story/1216305-we-can-take-this-right Thanks in advance!

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@archie3456 the story line is awesome! you have a couple spelling/grammar mistakes so you should probably read over your story again to check that. btw my sister and l not me and my sister (2nd paragraph from the bottom of page one, ch 1) how ya been sug? (17th paragraph, page two, ch 1) what does that mean??? those really stuck out to me, but you should still check for speling and grammar mistakes, you don't capitalize a lot of your words at the beginnings of sentences and sometimes l is not capitalized (if you write it on wattpad, you can use the L key instead of shift and i, they look the same!). l really like the story though! also on the side (where you have the pictures) isn't josh a ginger? oh! and you don't have to put Ashley's POV at the beginning of every chapter, when you switch points of view you put it, unless the rest of the story is going to be in somone else's point of view? l hope you keep writing more :D

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http://www.wattpad.com/story/1194140-controlled-by-death-book-one-completed

Thanks!(:

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http://www.wattpad.com/story/1249417-mind-shatter-chapter-2-in-progress

When the countries of the world take interest in psychokinetic people, they scramble to recruit them for their armies. Many accept the position but many also refuse. Those who refuse are kidnapped by their government and subjected to a process called mind overlay. An artificial personality is injected into your body to gain control of your mind. The only known counter to this process is for the person to look at his/her reflection.

When young soldier Ruben Rivers accidentally looks at his reflection and sees his father in a vision, he begins to suspect that something is terribly wrong with his life and sets out to rediscover his life. No one could have predicted that he would end up shaking the world over.

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@Dermit l really like your writing style! l love your title and cover! it is very detailed, awesome job! you don't have any spelling/grammar mistakes that l noticed, so they are either very minor or there aren't any, l'm going to go with there aren't any :) although i only read the first three chapters, l plan to read more when l make my critique list smaller :D sorry l don't have a lot of criticism, your story was that good. keep it up!

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