Telling honestly what I think about your story *NO CATCH* Nagtatagalog rin ako, wag matakot.

I really like the beginning of 'The Death of June' It's really good so far I have to read the rest later as I have to help with something but well done

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Here's mine: http://www.wattpad.com/4170272-tales-of-ocd

and now I'm off to read yours =D

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@Bluecowshavebluemilk Hmm, your chapter 1 left a smile to my face and I love it. Continue bringing emotions to the reader and you're spectacular!! Please read my story and give it a chance thank youuuu <3 http://www.wattpad.com/story/1255835-death-of-june

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Love, regrets and Lies. http://www.wattpad.com/story/1101234-love-regrets-and-lies Click the link... Y AREN'T U KLICKIN IT! I- I'LL MAKE YOU YAWN! YAWN YAWN YAAAAAAAAAWWN. Yawn. Yawwwwwwwwnn. MWAHAHAHAHAHAAAAA, bet you wished you clicked it now, don'cha?

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@iramilham Okay!! I was the first reader!! *evil laugh* The vocabulary is awesome but you son't need to show it off. It was like the story was shouting to me "I know more vocabulary than you! HAHAHAH" I don't know. That's what I felt. Thank you for checking out my story, it means a lot <3

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READ IF YOU ARE NOT EASILY SCARED.

@LimeJuice @callmeishaa @iramilham

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http://www.wattpad.com/story/1138638-my-new-older-brother trailer: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=GH7yDb_Wr_4

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@LimeJuice What's up with the aigfbbhvkdbjdbhkjd? Hahahaha. I felt the emotions that the story shouted but not the iwfhsefvjsdbvdj. I Honestly don't get that.

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@ZAYNIARRYLOUIAM Your description scared the crap out of me as well as the story. Is it a true story? :)

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Kennedy Star is an extraordinarily beautiful girl with a dark past. Things for worst when her parents died and she was invited to live with her Godfather Robin Styles... She instantly caught the eye of Harry Styles, and the young pop star was prepared to do everything in his power to make her his. However, Kennedy wasn't interested in Harry in anyway. when she met the rest of the band, she fell uncontrollably in love with the one that she could never have and attracted unwanted attention. Overtime, Kennedy did something that she never wanted and what happens when her past came knocking at her door? http://www.wattpad.com/story/1271121-deadly-beauty-one-direction

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http://www.wattpad.com/4258476-mind-shatter-chapter-2-in-progress-mind-shatter

The prologue is only on page long. Chapter one is just a little over one page.

When the countries of the world take interest in psychokinetic people, they scramble to recruit them for their armies. Many accept the position but many also refuse. Those who refuse are kidnapped by their government and subjected to a process called mind overlay. An artificial personality is injected into your body to gain control of your mind. The only known counter to this process is for the person to look at his/her reflection.

When young soldier Ruben Rivers accidentally looks at his reflection and sees his father in a vision, he begins to suspect that something is terribly wrong with his life and sets out to find his family.

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http://www.wattpad.com/story/1270857-when-midnight-comes

Tell me if you like it!

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I don't want to lie but, it can happen to anyone.. [and yes, it did] @callmeishaa

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@babyhaemi That Chapter 1 was mind boggling. Is it poking my mind? Cause I feel like it is. But I feel like I know what will happen to the ending. I want you to make the ending etched into the reader's mind even if the idea is common and known. :)

Please check out my story: http://www.wattpad.com/story/1255835-death-of-june

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@callmeishaa any ideas on how to do that? i just started writing any help is appreciated so that i'll improve n_n thanks

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@MollyNight And so another one direction fan fiction!! (hey, it rhymed :D) Your idea was known but do you have a meeting? You're moving too fast. The readers must have time to adjust. And that's all I have to say. Thanks :)

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@babyhaemi I don't know. We have different minds. You know, every reader when reading a story is thinking what will happen next? You place yourself as a reader and read your story. You're gonna think what will happen next? Then I suggest you twist that. :)

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@callmeishaa i get the idea now. i'll keep that in mind. thanks a lot! :D

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http://www.wattpad.com/3388250-the-clockwise-city-chapter-1 alright here is mine! I'll go read yours

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@NajeeKA To catch a reader's attention. It must have a cover that relates to the story. The tittle itself was mind boggling but as a reader, the story is not friendly to the eyes. Add spaces more but not too much. And continue writing. :)

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zephyr lives in a world of magic and spills were wars had started , she had a vision about a boy who will stave her back , soon she meets him in real world were she becomes his team leader and find out that he has no feelings , she thinks that if she help him to get his feelings back then that means he wont kill her later , but he doesn't want her help , until the unexpected happened ....he fill in love.

http://www.wattpad.com/4155967-sky-towers-prologue

the story is still new , i haven't got to the real events yet .

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@Sizily It got a reaction from me and I like that. So far, Chapter 1 seems awesome. Mind your spacing though. It seems to compact. :)

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http://www.wattpad.com/user/PeterPan0409

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Okay, any ideas on how to make it better? I kind of had a feeling things were coming way to fast in the first chapter, but I think I needed to hear someone else say it. Thanks though!

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@callmeishaa You're the first to comment on the spacing. Sorry about that, I'm still writing like it's an essay xD Thanks a bunch.

I've already asked a few people to create a cover, but apparently my request is kind of hard :P

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