I will critique your story or poem

i will critique for you. i will be honest and give you honest opinions and advice

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Title: Transparent

Genre: Romance, Teen Fiction, Fantasy, Humor(Future), Highschool Setting

Summary: This story revolves around Catherine Cassio, a girl who unexpectantly dies due to a car crash, after running off in seeing a misunderstood situation between her boyfriend, Asher, and rival, Khimberly. In the afterlife, she meets a mysterious stranger who introduces herself as Patrice. Patrice tells Catherine she's given another chance at love, at the cost of her life and a new one. Catherine complies; and this, is where her adventure begins. Reborn as Zayne Willows, follow Catherine as she uncovers the mystery and truth behind her death, face the most tremendous of betrayals, and most especially, get back the love of her life.

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I'd appreciate a critique. Be as honest as you possibly can. :D Thanks.

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http://www.wattpad.com/4267527-a-girl-named-jaymes 

A Girl Named Jaymes:

 Jaymes always gets into trouble. She's a tomboy that doesnt care about anyone or anything. Jaymes used to be a normal high school girl- but that was before Jaymes' best friend Kait, died in a car crash. The same car crash that Jaymes was in. The only difference was that Jaymes survived and Kait didn't. Jaymes' single and 'annoying' mother gets tired of Jaymes and sends her off to Armitage Boarding School. But there is one weird thing. One of the dorm houses are filled with complete psycos. The same dorm that Jaymes was put into. She realizes that everyone thinks SHE is also one of the 'Tainted' as the school puts it. She's determined to show everyone that she isn't the psyco they think she is, but by trying to convince them, does that mean she would have to bring out her soft side?? The soft side that she only showed Kait, the only one she trusted? Jaymes will have to trust herself before she trusts anyone else again.

Enjoy(;x

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@Dopeynessence Transparent: This book is very well written. The plot is good and it grabs the readers. The description could use some work add more million dollar words. ( descriptive). other than that i really injoyed this book

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@MrsMadiStyles Oh oh please can you give me feedback?

Name: Earth Master

Link: http://www.wattpad.com/story/1232605-earth-master

Genre: Fantasy

Plot: The story takes place in world where there are people who are born as demons and who are chosen as masters. Over the years masters have attacked demon territories and forced them to hide in shadows. This is the story of a girl named Aurora and a boy named Moonshade, who wanted revenge for their families.

Thank you!

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@MrsMadiStyles Thank you for the brief critique. I'll keep what you said in mind. ^_^!

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1. http://www.wattpad.com/story/1239478-a-rebellious-fate

A Rebellious Fate

Would you run away with a guy you only met for five short minutes? Nadine would.

2. http://www.wattpad.com/story/1253024-the-fine-line-between-sex-and-romance

The Fine Line Between Sex and Romance

If there’s anything guys hated more than getting rejected, it’s being humiliated. And I just did that to a school heartthrob in front of his friends. Boy, was I in trouble.

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When eighteen year old Draven Renati begins to suffer from strangely familiar nightmares he is thrown into a world of pain and blood. A world where dreams become a terrifying reality and where the people are strangely familiar. A world where Draven uncovers his shadowed history. So many questions... Who is this strange man who lay dying in the desert? Who does this sweet yet unnerving voice that whispers in his mind belong too? And Who Is he? Draven soon learns that the sweetest words contain the darkest of secrets ...

http://www.wattpad.com/story/1164283-whispering-knives

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@MrsMadiStyles It's new and short, one page only o.O

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@MrsMadiStyles please take some time reviewing my stories

http://www.wattpad.com/story/1235474-his-last-goodbye-a-sherlock-holmes-fanfiction

http://www.wattpad.com/story/1239682-my-immortal

you can choose either one. thank you :D yp

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If you could reveiw the first chapter (not the prologue!!!) I will be eternally grateful

http://www.wattpad.com/4221281-butterflies-she-sleeps-forever

Title: Butterflies

Genre: Fantasy

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If you have time, thanks :)

http://www.wattpad.com/story/1102941-something-about-summer

All Raine Evans wanted was a peaceful summer. Instead, she's stuck in a ridiculous challenge, and partnered with her worst enemy, and best friend's brother, Kaden Fleming. 

It's Boys VS Girls and the loser will have to be the winner's slave for the rest of the summer.

But Raine's not sure that's something she can survive.

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I have a short poem called BEHIND ENEMY LINES. I would love to find out what you think about it.

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I have two stories you can just chose whichever interests you the most. Thanks so much! =) The Dark Flame

http://www.wattpad.com/story/1135860-the-dark-flame

Summary: A more or less normal girl lived innocently, trying to find her place in the world. Until somebody killed everything she held dear. And now she needs revenge. But revenge comes at a price. A price that Dania is not certain she can afford.

Genre: Adventure and Mystery/Suspense

or Alexis in the Land of Zendor

http://www.wattpad.com/story/1034692-alexis-in-the-land-of-zendor

Summary: I look in the mirror and see my own two colourful eyes staring right back at me. They look normal enough to me. Unfortunately, normal enough doesn't cut it in the land of Zendor. Or what we used to call it, Earth. Since the 'meteor' arrived and caused so many mutations, eye colour decides everything. Gold eyes? Elite private school. Brown eyes? No school at all. A mixture of different colours? The only thing that awaits you is death. Especially if you're somebody like me, a girl who happens to have all 5 colours. That's not the way it should be. So I'm going to try to change these laws. Or die in the process.

Genre: Fantasy and Adventure

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http://www.wattpad.com/story/1232748-princess-super-nova

Please and thank you

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http://www.wattpad.com/4236147-tea-time-prolouge

Ethel and Eli are twins on the brink of separation. While nearing the age seventeen Eli knows he is to be drafted into the Union Army and fight against his younger sibling, who ran away to join the Confederates. The only way the twins can hope to be together is if they take an invitation to work for the eccentric and strange Dr. Abner Edwards. Seems simple enough, right?

But Dr. Edwards has a secret, one that involves a world that might just live right beneath the ground, a negro who claims to have powers to see the unseen, and an exotic boy who claims to be from the future.

How will the twins survive with an angry mob running after Eli, odd creatures attacking the patients, a civil war of another world effecting their own, or troubles with the time-space continuum? Never mind that, it's time for tea.

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Cool greatly in need of crtic, all you can do is helpful, thanks. http://www.wattpad.com/story/1263081-part-of-the-collection

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@MrsMadiStyles http://www.wattpad.com/4233974-remembering-the-stars-prologue

thank you in advance(:

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http://www.wattpad.com/4231151-the-driver-chapter-2-james

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http://www.wattpad.com/story/1025369-knowing-you%27re-there Knowing You're There: Although Lia is blind, she has the fantasy of finding the perfect guy, just like everyone else, along with becoming a rock star drummer. However, she has always been the outcast in school. When she meets Kurt Hines, all her dreams start coming true, one at a time.

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@MrsMadiStyles I hope you can also give me tips on how to improve! :) Here's the link to my story called "Crazed". http://www.wattpad.com/1902583-crazed-chapter-one It's a little rough, but I hope you can check it out!!!!

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http://www.wattpad.com/story/987080-camp-trip-from-hell-chapter-1 any type of feedback would be great i hope you get a chance to read it @MrsMadiStyles

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@MrsMadiStyles This is my first story and I published it the day I finished writing it so my fault.

Title: memory recollection book 1: Azuma genre: romance, adventure, mystery, teen fiction, and other summary: It's pretty much about a girl who lost her memory and is trying to get it back. pretty much doing anything.

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Please assess my story My Crazy Psychotic Love on my page. Thank you! It is my first time riting these sort of topics.

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http://www.wattpad.com/story/1169318-the-killing "The Killing" (Thriller). Thank you! :)

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