I am all about making things better, if I think your story is really good I will tell you. If I think it will need work, I will tell you. I think everybody has room for a checker or a person to read over it and tell them what you think. I do things like looks for, errors in spelling, error's in word sentences, also I check to see if you have a nice plot. How your characters interact. And more! I am a great Critique because I am HONEST!!!!

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@SkittlesAreYummy123 Oh please :')

Link: http://www.wattpad.com/story/1892775-%27%C3%A7%C3%BFn%C3%AA-the-heart-of-s%C3%A9ron-book-one-watty-awards Horror/Thriller

http://www.wattpad.com/story/2016387-death-before-birth

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http://www.wattpad.com/2153701-just-an-orphan-girl-orphan-girl-1

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I truly need someone to tell me if this is good...http://www.wattpad.com/story/1689968-the-healings-of-time

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http://www.wattpad.com/7193556-drug-of-the-heart

Fan me if you like it. Appreciate your honesty.

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Taier Joyce, is the typical teenager. Not too popular at school, but not a loser either. She lives a normal life with her single mother. It has been just the two of them for so long, that both Taier and her mother are shocked at her mother's unexpected pregnancy. Who would have thought that her mother's pregnancy would lead to her finding love and falling for it hard? Is this the real thing or will this just lead to yet another heartbreak?

http://www.wattpad.com/story/2056702-ever-after

This is pretty new; I’d love to get you opinion on this. :) I wanna improve my writing in all ways possible, so critique away!

Thank you in advance for your time :D

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@SkittlesAreYummy123 I'd love some feedback on Majestic Shadows. It was recently featured, and I never hear from mobile readers, so I'm wondering if the prologue is enough to hook the reader. Thank you so much!

http://www.wattpad.com/story/785094-majestic-shadows-the-pillar-of-smoke

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http://www.wattpad.com/story/1161575-one-plus-one-equals-love

My book. It'd be great if you could read it over.

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Working on a new version...where to take it? http://www.wattpad.com/story/1395984-reckless-abandon

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Please and thank you ^^

THE RENEGADE KING

http://www.wattpad.com/7232781-the-renegade-king

Ashling is a Laird - a superior race with enhanced strength and survivability. Unfortunately, Lairds are hunted by the tyrannical King Damian and his vicious army of Ghasts (who, by the way, turn out to be part-time wolves with a secret), and Ashling must stay hidden in her quiet village of Stream if she wants to retain her freedom.

Then the Tournament - a wrestling competition designed to flush out Lairds - swings by the village of Stream, and Ashling's race is exposed. She manages to escape, accompanied by trusty best friend Fabe (who is human).

But before Ashling and Fabe can figure out their future as fugitives, they are kidnapped by a mysterious duo in an airship. One of them is the frosty yet complex Templeton, who seems determined to keep his distance from Ashling. The other is Marylea, a highly-spirited girl with a cause against human slavery.

Together, the quartet embark on a quest to save the Kingdom of Dreamlian from Damian's cruel hands. But the Kingdom of Dreamlian and King Damian's tower harbor dark and unexpected secrets, and as Ashling and Templeton's relationship evolves into something more, their quest gets more complicated with each step of the way...

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Thanks very much! :D

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@SkittlesAreYummy123 Thank you so so much for the time!

http://www.wattpad.com/story/2082746-losing-liam-ziam-fic

Liam is forgetting everything and everyone and there is nothing Zayn can do about it.

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Here is mine if you want to look at it. I really need some feedback!

http://www.wattpad.com/story/2125567-chained-to-you

Here is what it is about:

In a world where war is continuous and choosing the wrong side is fatal, a girl named Callia lives with her parents. Callia used to be rich, due to her father's status as a great warrior, but only a year ago he fell and permanently injured himself. He can no longer fight and it is up to Callia to support her family. In the world Callia lives in, the only way for a girl to get money is through marriage. At a young age, Callia must marry a man she has never met before, a man who's family has a bad reputation for supporting their enemies and becoming a tritor for it. Can Callia survive the rest of her life with this man she has never met? Can she even survive the twenty four hours following the wedding, a day that, according to tradition, Callia must be chained to her new husband?

Callia dreams of doing something that makes a difference for her country, a dream that no women should dare to have. She thought that by marrying this man she was giving up her right to adventure, but the adventure has just begun.

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http://www.wattpad.com/story/1748600-third Waking up in a nightmare can be daunting for a boy whose last memory was getting out of a mall. Being chased by creatures from old wives tales is worse, but to discover that the key to all these lies within him…is madness. Book One of the Seven Gates Trilogy introduces Anrhu to Buglas, a world inhabited by mananaggals, tikbalangs and other creatures from Philippine Folklore, where the keys to the gates of the mystical Kanlaon could spell disaster or the reality of a world in ruins.

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hi! i'd love for you to critique one of my stories! i have 6 short stories - just pick the one that interests you most. Thanks!

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"In death, she had never felt so alive." Autumn Iverson is dead. Trapped on the mysterious train station to the afterlife where she meets the emotionally closed off Josh, bubbly Charlotte and others. However, when Autumn reunites with Dylan she discovers life after death. As she grows closer to both Josh and Dylan she finds herself caught between the living and dead, when a startling revelation sends her afterlife into turmoil. Romantic and mystical Soul Splitters is an unconventional tale with a unique take on life after death. Can a dead heart still love?

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@SkittlesAreYummy123 Hi. ^^

Can you please critique my short story?

http://www.wattpad.com/story/1827561-survivor

Thanks in advance.

:) x

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SAY - I'd be very appreciative if I could get some comments on my vampire satire story. It's under the catagory "Paranormal" but it's really "irreverent fiction" as all my writing is.

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http://www.wattpad.com/6465086-chasing-the-past-chapter-1

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http://www.wattpad.com/story/1453091-a-twist-in-my-story

Abigail, a shy girl, gets invited to her friends party. During the party one of her best friends tricks her into playing seven minutes in heaven. While in the closet she finds Brendan. Who is this strange boy? Will this guy put a twist in her story?

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@SkittlesAreYummy123

A Harlot’s Heel

http://www.wattpad.com/story/2126193-a-harlot%27s-heel

"Hey, nerd." Millie said in a shaky voice. "What?" Gavin growled back. "Help. I think I just lodged my heel in Scarlet Harlot's brain, and think she might be dead."

When that Harlot framed Millie, she couldn't quite forgive her. But maybe she took it a step too far when she saw Scarlet Harlot kissing her boyfriend, and lodged her heel in her brain. So she calls on the un-coolest, equivalent of Steven Hawking (wheelchair and all) kid in the whole of the universe; Gavin Bleach. In hopes of getting laid, he agrees to her terms of him using his super brain to get Millie out of trouble, while keeping her oh-so-slutty reputation.

Laugh as the bitch-slap and desperation are taken to new levels.

thanks in advance!

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http://www.wattpad.com/story/2117673-the-sex-doll-killer

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http://www.wattpad.com/story/2117611-welcome-to-the-hell-hole

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@yrin71096 Right away ma'am ! :)

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@Unique-is-me You are next !! :)

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