Will CRITIQUE the 1st two chapters of your story!!!

Hi. I'm fairly new here so I'm also looking for readers. But I also realized that one of the best ways to do this is to read other's work. So I'm willing to read, comment and critique "ongoing" or "unfinished" stories in exchange for you reading Prologue and my Chapter 1 of either TRES or BIRTH. Here are the links:

http://www.wattpad.com/story/1748600-tres : He felt the trickle of something warm on his face. That made him wake up, only to find that he was in a nightmare. He knew lost consciousness, only to be awaken to a world where his worst imaginations roamed the land that was not what he remembered. How can he fight back and return to a world that somehow no longer exists when he does not even know what reality is and what or who among the living is a friend or foe; imagined or no!

http://www.wattpad.com/story/1749139-birth : On a dark and stormy night, a shrill cry broke through the cacophony of the winds as a woman screamed in childbirth. The twins, separated and orphaned grew up to discover the power of the elements and the shattering of beliefs that will eventually dictate the world's salvation.

Post your links and I'll get back to you ASAP or you can go to my stories, and leave comment with a link to your work.

Thanks!

*Ill fan those stories that I think have the most promise and I'll vote too!

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http://www.wattpad.com/story/1906270-the-legacy-series-book-one-the-champion

What if GOD wasn't the being humanity thought of? What if GOD whom created the universe was actually a race of extraterrestrial beings called "Legacies" and what if your father was their champion?

Alex Latterdale just discovered that his beloved father was actually the champion of the legacies but now that he's dead, they're expecting Alex to fill in his father's shoe. If you were Alex, what would you do? turn your back on the people whom believed that you can finally lead them to victory? or accept your destiny and become The Champion of Hyperion?

Mark Stint is the new Champion of Chaos. Ghost Servants? An awesome weapon? what more could he ask for? but as he realize, being a champion isn't about sitting on sofa and eating jelly beans all day, it is about protecting your planet at all costs and Mark wasn't even sure that he's the one for the job that he openly accepted......

Follow Alex and Mark as they went on a quest to rescue the person they both care for.... but a simple quest suddenly turnes into a mission that might rest the fate of the universe in either of their hands........

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@FlaskyandEquinox im on it.... :)

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Hmm, If you have some time.. my dedication will just take a few seconds. If you want to continue reading from there, thanks, if not, thanks still.

http://www.wattpad.com/story/1892775-%27%C3%A7%C3%BFn%C3%AA-the-heart-of-s%C3%A9ron-book-one

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@FlaskyandEquinox DONE! :) hope you read mine and leave a comment please

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@yrin71096 on it now...

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Hello, welcome to WattPad! :) It seems like you want to advertise and read other people's stories, there is a forum for that. if you go to Share Your Story you are free to advertise your own story there, and read others if you are not in the mood to exchange stories. :)

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@yrin71096 DONE!

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http://www.wattpad.com/story/1485131-of-the-sea :) as honest as you like

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Shrinking Universe

Ian Wilde doesn't know what gives him the courage to knock on a stranger's door. His mom died from cancer not long ago and his crush since forever is done with him. Losing his dignity is the last thing that he worries about when he has lost everything. This dramatic and controversial story will take you on a journey from laughter to tears and back again.

http://www.wattpad.com/6531111-shrinking-universe-watty-awards-2012

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http://www.wattpad.com/story/1838080-kill-joy This is my friend's story. Its truly well written, though its only one part. Ill read in her place. Shame theres so little reads on her story.

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Please! http://www.wattpad.com/story/1908776-should-have-said-no

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I'm writing a book and I'm not sure if I lik the way it sounds. its not really a romance novel but its going to be help me make sure im on the right track?

if you want to read it heres the link

http://www.wattpad.com/6538049-your-mine-chapter-1

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An unusual novel.

>>http://www.wattpad.com/story/1906345-stories-the-butterfly-told-me<<

I held it in my hands close to my heart - that's how I heard it you know - the butterfly. It told me all of its stories; big as small, beautiful as unpleasant, crucial as insignificant. There were stories of hatred and love, winter and summer, boys and girls - all different kind of accounts from all over the world.

Each chapter of this story consists of a short eyewitness account as described to me by the butterfly. I hope you will find it interesting and eventually as me – find out why it all matters.

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@KurisutaruRivaa im on it... :)

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Reading Birth now. the summary caught my attention.

http://www.wattpad.com/story/1654246-ashes-of-the-dawn Patrick is an old vampire. He is nearing one-thousand years old. He is in an age group most vampires never see. His memories are starting to fade, which is a sign he is getting closer to something vampires simply call "The Madness". A condition in which the vampire becomes little more then a mindless beast. Wanting to leave the mortal world with some dignity he aims to go to his final death soon.

However, while walking home from a meeting, he saves a young woman by the name of Aria. He thought that he merely saved her from some young vampires who were breaking the rules of basic vampire society. What he finds is a cult of vampires known as the Dawns Ashes are after her. She saw something the night he saved her. What she saw and now knows does not only threaten all vampires, but everyone who lives in the mortal realm.

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If you have the time, I will surely read your story in exchange for you reading mine.

http://www.wattpad.com/story/1710662-embraces-the-night-rated-r Emily is no typical female. She is allergic to men. Yup that’s right. If she has more than one date with a guy she gets sick. Not slightly sick, deathly ill. But when Emily meets Brady she wishes she could see him again. He's hot, he's romantic and she wants’ him more than she's ever wanted anyone. But she knows one date and its OVER. No way is she going down that path. She would rather love him from afar.

Brody can be anyone or anything he puts his mind to. Brody is an Astanian (a shifter) and he's put his mind on winning Emily. At first he can't understand why she won't agree to go out with him. Then he hears the stories, lots and lots of them. Deciding that he will get what he wants, he sets out on a plan to romance and teach Emily once and for all....even if it means he has to make himself look like a different guy every night of Emily's life until she embraces the night with him.

-----There is also a PG-13 version if you would rather read that: http://www.wattpad.com/story/1762749-embraces-the-night-pg13-edited

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@Kalalea15 hi, your daughter read my work, thanks... im currently reading yours!!! will post comments soon... :)

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@ariyanna_bites DONE!

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@Dani1018 DONE! please comment on mine... :) http://www.wattpad.com/story/1748600-tres

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@nessquik DONE! loved it!

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So I've only written one chapter and I need some serious feed back here, So please give it a look and let me know what you think. Please and Thank You!

http://www.wattpad.com/story/1912182-sweet-music

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UP.... Comment on TRES or BIRTH and tell me how you like it and ill critique your work as well... Thanks

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@Alexis_Stone DONE!

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bump

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