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@caitybug13 it's a short story :)

You know that girl you called fat? She’s been starving herself for God knows how long.

You know that chick you called emo? She’s been battling depression for years.

You know that gal you bullied and whenever she would cry you would say “Aww is little Missy going to go cry to her mommy and daddy?” Her parents died a couple years ago and she’s still grieving their death.

The tiniest thing can hurt a person beyond words, but it can also shed light to a dark tunnel. This is Missy Vega’s story about loss, hurt, betrayal and hope.

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Ian Wilde doesn't know what gives him the courage to knock on a stranger's door. His mom died from cancer not long ago and his crush since forever is done with him. Losing his dignity is the last thing that he worries about when he has lost everything. This dramatic and controversial story will take you on a journey from laughter to tears and back again.

http://www.wattpad.com/6531111-shrinking-universe-watty-awards-2012

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Hello, read mine please?:) It's a really short story, only 2 pages long:)

Title: The Murder of my Hand

Link: http://www.wattpad.com/story/1922468-the-murder-of-my-hand

Synopsis: A girl gets accepted into a prestigious overseas school of her dreams However, her mother disallows her from going for no reason. Will she obey or rebel?

Thank you!:)

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@caitybug13

Hi there! ((:

This is your classic boy meets girl story. Vincent is sitting at a coffee shop, reading a book. All of a sudden, Harper walks in, dripping wet from the pouring rain. He offers his handkerchief to her, not knowing that it will be the start of their love story. Vince does all the romantic things, like in the movies. But, as said in the title, he doesn't get the ending he expects. It's got romance, tidbits of comedy, and some drama. I hope you like it. Thank you! ((: This is a story about a guy who found love through hate. What happens when the governor's rebel son falls in love? A lot of things. But you can have the pleasure of finding out for yourself. It's only three pages but I hope you like it. Thank you! ((: Cairo Ocampo was Dune Tomas' first love, first boyfriend, and first kiss. Unfortunately, Cai doesn't remember any of this because it all happened seven years ago in kindergarten. He and his family has since moved abroad. But now he is coming back. Dune still has everything he gave her, especially his break-up note. It's only six pages right now. ((:

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Hmm, If you have some time.. my dedication will just take a few seconds. If you want to continue reading from there, thanks, if not, thanks still.

http://www.wattpad.com/story/1892775-%27%C3%A7%C3%BFn%C3%AA-the-heart-of-s%C3%A9ron-book-one

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http://www.wattpad.com/story/1906270-the-legacy-series-book-one-the-champion

What if GOD wasn't the being humanity thought of? What if GOD whom created the universe was actually a race of extraterrestrial beings called "Legacies" and what if your father was their champion?

Alex Latterdale just discovered that his beloved father was actually the champion of the legacies but now that he's dead, they're expecting Alex to fill in his father's shoe. If you were Alex, what would you do? turn your back on the people whom believed that you can finally lead them to victory? or accept your destiny and become The Champion of Hyperion?

Mark Stint is the new Champion of Chaos. Ghost Servants? An awesome weapon? what more could he ask for? but as he realize, being a champion isn't about sitting on sofa and eating jelly beans all day, it is about protecting your planet at all costs and Mark wasn't even sure that he's the one for the job that he openly accepted......

Follow Alex and Mark as they went on a quest to rescue the person they both care for.... but a simple quest suddenly turnes into a mission that might rest the fate of the universe in either of their hands........

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@caitybug13 http://www.wattpad.com/6239051-survivor

I hope you like it. ^^

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@caitybug13 PLEASE critique my storyy! http://www.wattpad.com/story/1908776-should-have-said-no

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@caitybug13

Tar :D

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If you have time. Thanks

http://www.wattpad.com/6591753-reddswood-girls

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1. STORY

>>> http://www.wattpad.com/story/1571180-strange-love <<<<

FAN FICTION

Niall Horan - am I suppose to know that guy? Well you might know of him - but I firstly discovered who he really was, when he sent me that skype message.

Molly Winter is working hard to earn money for her art studies. Even with her troubled family and dark future prospects she stays optimistic. One very early foggy morning in London everything changes. Her path of life crosses the Irish boy band member Niall Horan's, who seems to be her very own 'Irish Guardian Angel'. As she discovers, he is in fact a world-known celebrity, her life will never be the same.

This is a story of ones destiny, facing true love and overcoming tough times in life.

2. STORY

An unusual novel.

>>http://www.wattpad.com/story/1906345-stories-the-butterfly-told-me<<

I held it in my hands close to my heart - that's how I heard it you know - the butterfly. It told me all of its stories; big as small, beautiful as unpleasant, crucial as insignificant. There were stories of hatred and love, winter and summer, boys and girls - all different kind of accounts from all over the world.

Each chapter of this story consists of a short eyewitness account as described to me by the butterfly. I hope you will find it interesting and eventually as me – find out why it all matters.

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Title: The Cry of Her Heart

Nathaniel was a young man given the responsibility of evicting a woman from her home. He never expected how it would affect his future... Vianna was a woman blessed with love for her son. She never could have imagined the challenges she would face when she opened her door to a stranger... He was a man of wealth and she was a woman of poverty. They both had hidden pasts and possessed secret stories. Yet, when thrown together under unusual circumstances, they find themselves bound by their faith and love for each other.

http://www.wattpad.com/story/1286718-the-cry-of-her-heart

Thanks!

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http://www.wattpad.com/story/1892775-%27%C3%A7%C3%BFn%C3%AA-the-heart-of-s%C3%A9ron-book-one

For anyone who has the time my dedication will just take a few seconds to read, if you want to continue from there thank you, if not, thank you still. Let's be fans and friends!

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@caroline52197 All Done :)

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@LucifersAdvocateIIII Done!!!

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@AGandSBforever Finished:)

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@CandW2 Done *_*

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@rockthatrevolution Done:)

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@caitybug13 can you read it if you like >.<

http://www.wattpad.com/6583533-music-codes

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I really need 7 More comment to reach my goal. Please oh please help me.

http://www.wattpad.com/story/1864472-honey-blood

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@caitybug13

"Can you just give me the freaking chess piece?!" I gave up trying to be calm, and snapped at Nate with crossed arms.

"Not until you get up there and sing." He smirked, a microphone extended towards me in his outstretched hand.

Grumbling to myself, I took a calming breath. I pinched the bridge of my nose and counted to ten. Come on, do it for Spades.

"Give me that mic." I muttered, snatching it from his hands.

Avery was devastated when her best friend Spades moved. She dated, and tried to move on, but no one could replace him. After her breakup with her recent boyfriend she discovers a chess piece attached with a puzzle piece and a folded note. There is a silver of hope when she recognizes her best friend's writing. Will these pieces lead her to finding her best friend? Throw in a jock who Avery had sparked his interest, and a jeck who reminds her of Spades... (I'm pretty bad at blurbs so don't let this put you off! D:)

http://www.wattpad.com/6356347-pieces-to-finding-you-watty-awards-2012-pieces-to

Check it out if you have time?(:

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@caitybug13 :)

♠ Title: By the Passing of Dawn

♠ Description:"The passing of dawn doesn’t mean your life shall pass too. It’s not the end; it’s the start of something new." For an 11-year-old girl who’s been through so much, by the passing of dawn, her life changes...forever. Because an angel’s smile can make you forget all your sorrows.

♠ Link: http://www.wattpad.com/story/1656366-by-the-passing-of-dawn

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Please do mine? Its only one chapter so far...

http://www.wattpad.com/story/1932387-ipod-stories

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http://www.wattpad.com/forums/discussion/286080/Please+critique+my+story%21%21 Check this out? Please and thank you! :$

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@caitybug13

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