HONEST CRITIQUING- critiquing and promoting :)

Hey, I am willing to help you get your book the talk of wattpad. I am interested in all types of subjects so that won't matter. I may not get past the first chapter though so you will have to respect that. I wil give you the truth and help you reach out for more readers. I will be honored if you choose me to help you. I am all about writing and I will help you make an amazing book! Please consider and I'm glad that you even bothered reading this :). Just reply below and I will check out all the books I can. I just finished doing 15 books yesterday so Post as many books you want me to look at. It doesn't matter. Thanks,

Dehlia :)

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@thegirlunderthecap uhhh hey i really need feedback on the starting of my story. Its really short since i only put up the prologue. I just need you to read it to tell me if its worth continuing or not.

Thanks :D

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http://www.wattpad.com/story/1726976-one-by-one

I would love some feedback! Thank you so much!! :) Hope you enjoy!

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@thegirlunderthecap My first chapter is broken into parts though... hopefully you will still read it.

Genre : Action /Fantasy

Summary : The Seven Deadly Sins have awoken and are now in search of “The Lost Banished Heir”, Cain who would be the key to their ascension to power. Cain’s incarnation, a 19 year old boy; who on his 20th birthday would become the most wanted human among these 7 demons. Will the sins claim his immortal soul or will he over come the darkness and temptation of each sin and rise with new found virtues

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@thegirlunderthecap Just do the one titled Comfort http://www.wattpad.com/6072285-in-a-world-full-of-noise-comfort It's a lyric poem...hope you can still critique...if not then just comment? Thanks :)

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http://www.wattpad.com/6004365-the-daemon-keeper-prologue

thanks:)

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http://www.wattpad.com/story/1485131-of-the-sea

Thanks :)

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http://www.wattpad.com/story/1799667-chimera

Thank you so much for your critiquing, I greatly appreciate your thoughts.

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http://www.wattpad.com/story/1705387-ace

here you go

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@thegirlunderthecap Hello! Thank you for doing this :D

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@thegirlunderthecap

She wants to forget... He wants to remember...

She spends her nights drinking and partying, trying to forget who she is. He spent four months in a coma and does not remember the last 2 years. She wants to erase her past and start over. He would do anything to remember his...

The struggle of two young people, trying to move forward when everything is holding them back. As they learn to understand each other, they also find something they didn't know they needed to let go of their past : love. A story about letting go of the things that hurt you and holding on to everything else

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http://www.wattpad.com/story/1109621-the-rebirth-of-indigo-caeli

The crowd was silent and all staring at the woman as they realized there was no room for rebellion if you wanted to make it out alive. Even though all their faces were expressionless, I could see the hope in their eyes fade with each word the bald woman spoke. I really didn't think much of this, at the time I held the same opinion as most of the country: They know what they did, they did it on purpose, and they deserve to die by the hands of their own. Looking back on it however, it was heartbreaking. Even though all these people have no chance to make anything out of their lives, they still wanted to live. Life was the only thing they had left in the world and they couldn't even keep that. How could we do that to other human beings? Yes they have committed some of the most hated, disgusting acts that have ever been conceived, maybe they have taken the life of someone's child or a lover, maybe they have caused someone to suffer through terrible pain and have gained the hatred of society as a whole, but when we let that hatred get the best of us is when we become the monsters. The Execution was simply an act of rejection of what we can become being exposed by those who have become something we consider to be terrible and beyond our capacities. We simply don't want to accept the reality of what we could be, that is why the Execution continued for as long as it did. I wish that the world had realized this sooner, but the government suppressed these ideas and truths for its own gain. In retrospect, they were the real monsters.

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@thegirlunderthecap Hello! I would appreciate it if you checked out three of my stories! http://www.wattpad.com/story/1724130-discovering-alice

http://www.wattpad.com/story/436465-how-i-lost-my-sister-to-drugs

http://www.wattpad.com/story/962064-blood-on-my-hands-rewritten

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http://www.wattpad.com/story/1564474-fenris-chronicles-army-of-hell thank you so much:D id really like it thank you

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Hi! First of all, thank you for doing this. You have no idea just how much it means to me. I'm thirteen, so I might not be the best writer out there, but I try. Nonetheless, please be harsh because who doesn't want to improve? Thank you again! ^-^

The Memoir Man:

http://www.wattpad.com/story/918337-the-memoir-man

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HI! Started this recently for my summer project. Only one chapter!

Like Rapunzel but Not Really

http://www.wattpad.com/story/1829172-like-rapunzel-but-not-really

Living a life out of a fairytale story is really not as it is cut out to be. I mean, Cinderella had to clean up a whole mansion by herself every day. Belle had to put up with a housemate who needed a shaver as much as he needed anger management classes. And don’t even let me get started with Snow White and her stepmom’s drama. Really, Rapunzel of the 21st century? I would rather be a tree. At least I would be contributing oxygen to the world.

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Would love to hear your advice/critiques on my story! I know I could use some.. ;-) http://www.wattpad.com/story/1821484-turning-tides

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@thegirlunderthecap Here's my short story: http://www.wattpad.com/story/1827561-survivor

^^

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http://www.wattpad.com/story/1485131-of-the-sea

Thank you!

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Thanks :)

When Raina Duresky has to get a job to survive, she fears she may never get the job she’s wanted because she lacks a college education. When her life intrigues Gayle Scott, a college graduate who has the life she’s always wanted, she realizes she isn’t the only one unsatisfied with life. But, will their dark pasts stop them from restarting their lives, or will they find their way back to each other to make their dreams come true? When fates collide, is it meant to be for a moment…or forever?

http://www.wattpad.com/6298726-when-fates-collide-chapter-1?d=ud

Secret Keeper-Ever since Aria (pronunciation: ar-RYE-a) was born she’s been a secret keeper. On contact, she learns a person’s secrets…but it is impossible for her to reveal them. Secrets are safe with her. But what happens when a secret can end a person’s life and Aria is the only one who knows? Can she save a life before it’s too late?

http://www.wattpad.com/story/1785918-secret-keeper

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@thegirlunderthecap hi it would mean a lot if you did, please tell me what you think, that good the bad and the ugly im all for it.

http://www.wattpad.com/6374199-pretty-twisted-short-story

thanks

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@thegirlunderthecap http://www.wattpad.com/5058636-straight-in-a-crooked-world

The world as we see it...or maybe it should be the gays as we see them! In a world where the population is prominently gay heterosexuality can cause conflicts. It did for these two! A nobody at Solae High - Jason suddenly finds himself the center of unwanted attention when the people of his world find out his preference! Unbeknownst, pulled to an old friend- Ashlia and her to him...these two find themselves against the world of homosexuals. As if life was easy with Mason bullying Jason to no ends he now had to suffer the scrutiny of his friends and classmates for choosing someone inappropriate? But was it really? Pushed against a wall with no way to escape these two teenagers stand to fight back for the person they love and who love them back just the same...but will they succeed?

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http://www.wattpad.com/story/1837800-broken-pieces

Thank you!

Things were easy for sleuth prodigy Nancy Hunter...Until she saw her father's murder happen right before her eyes, and barely escaping death herself. Four years later and she's an established detective, albeit not in the way she had previously intended, and more determined than ever to finally bring her father's killer to justice after a long and painful hiatus...But little does she know Flynn Jones is out to get her too...

Rated PG-13~Dark Themes and Actions, mild blood

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mines a poem, so I hope that's okay??

It's not quite done, but I'd love some fresh eyes!:)

http://www.wattpad.com/6322278-give-up-the-dream-dreamer @thegirlunderthecap

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Obviously I don't want you to be MEAN, per se... but don't hesitate to rip it to shreds.

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