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skylark698 Joined: 2012-03-14 Posts: 58 |
9 months ago
i will only provide critique for the following Genres: -Romance -Teen-Fiction -Historical Fiction -Humor -Werewolf -Vampire I will also provide you with ideas of how you could continue your stories if you want. P.S. It Should not be R-rated:) |
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a_aaron Joined: 2012-07-16 Posts: 198 |
9 months ago
hey i'd love some serious critique on my story coinholder :) maybe if you could also give it a rating on 1 -10 on what you think of it :D http://www.wattpad.com/story/1695224-coinholder-part-1 |
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skylark698 Joined: 2012-03-14 Posts: 58 |
9 months ago
I will read it and tell you:) |
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LovingJiYongSoMuch Joined: 2012-06-29 Posts: 1553 |
9 months ago
http://www.wattpad.com/5646168-clueless-heart I would like some too please and it's only three parts. If you can tell me what you think on them all and yes, I know I have some mistakes on the grammer. I just want to know about how the idea is and if it flows correctly :D |
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mollybritton Joined: 2012-05-27 Posts: 22 |
9 months ago
http://www.wattpad.com/4823974-dealing-with-the-devil-pr%C3%B3logo rate it as seriously, and as honestly as you can please! It's a romance story, interwoven with a paranormal plot, and it's pg. Also, can you give it a 1-10 rating on what you think of it, please? :) @skylark698 |
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dreamsmadereal Joined: 2012-01-25 Posts: 3115 |
9 months ago
@skylark698 I would love a critique on this story! Crash:http://www.wattpad.com/5337711-crash-prologue Genre:Humor/Teen Fiction- Bayleigh is a spoiled teenager living the life of luxury. Suddenly, her family loses everything. How will she be able to survive moving from a mansion into a trailer park, living right across the street from one of her greatest enemies? |
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skylark698 Joined: 2012-03-14 Posts: 58 |
9 months ago
@anna_aaron on a scale from 1-10 i would rate your story at 8. Your story is great but the discription lacks. When a reader looks for a book, he always looks at the discription first, so i think you should make your description a bit more catchy. For example you could mention that it was a dance school scholarship and not any school. Other than that, i think its good and definitely worth reading. |
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skylark698 Joined: 2012-03-14 Posts: 58 |
9 months ago
@LovingJiYongSoMuch The idea is great but some parts have too much details. Like for example its not necessary to mention the whole bathroom routine. The action scene lacks a bit. I think as far as your grammar and language goes, you could try and get your self an editor in the editors forum. |
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LovingJiYongSoMuch Joined: 2012-06-29 Posts: 1553 |
9 months ago
@skylark698 Thank you :3 I see well I put some details in it from that time since I was in the mood you know x3 The other time I just wasn't in the right mind so it was different from how I really wanted it. Again, thank you and I hope you read on |
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skylark698 Joined: 2012-03-14 Posts: 58 |
9 months ago
@mollybritton I would definitely give you a 9 on this. The story is great, the flow is great but you should make the prologue a bit more catchy. the rest is good. The only thing you need tot do now is promote it. |
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WhiteKitten965 Joined: 2011-12-15 Posts: 5 |
9 months ago
i would really appretiate knowing what you think, mostly about the actual story. is it good? http://www.wattpad.com/story/1754328-what-happened-to-me its about a girl who has lost her memory and is now trying to find her old life. Her only lead is a strange, cyptic note and her random flashbacks. Join Claire as she looks for who she was, discovers who she is, and finds a life and love she never expected. :) |
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mollybritton Joined: 2012-05-27 Posts: 22 |
9 months ago
@skylark698 Thank you! I'll edit the prologue now, and I'll start thinking of ways to promote it. :D |
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skylark698 Joined: 2012-03-14 Posts: 58 |
9 months ago
@dreamsmadereal i havent read it all yet but though the story idea is great as well as the flow, the problem i see is that it doesnot seem realistic that just because of one big case lost, they went totally broke and just the next day her phone was taken away. I think even if he lost the case he still is a lawyer. Maybe he wont get big cases anymore but there are still small cases. I mean they were Upper Class one night and lower class the other....so where did average go? other than this problem the story is great and your way of expressing things is good too:) |
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MissLoveAffairs Joined: 2012-02-20 Posts: 7 |
9 months ago
@skylark698 can u give me some ideas to carry on |
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skylark698 Joined: 2012-03-14 Posts: 58 |
9 months ago
Well you will have to tell me what you want to do. I mean do you want to write a story? If you do, what genre do you want it to be? @MissLoveAffairs |
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skylark698 Joined: 2012-03-14 Posts: 58 |
9 months ago
@WhiteKitten965 Its really gud....just try to make the name of the book and the description more catchy. The story is great till now but make sure to give it a great unexpected twist somewhere so that it doesnt seem cliche. the rest idea is great. |
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ScarlettEDe Joined: 2012-07-18 Posts: 193 |
9 months ago
http://www.wattpad.com/story/1768915-holding-on-and-letting-go She wants to forget... He wants to remember... She spends her nights drinking and partying, trying to forget who she is. He spent 4 months in a coma and does not remember the last 2 years. She wants to erase her past and start over He would do anything to remember his... The struggle of two young people, trying to move forward when everything is holding them back. As they learn to understand each other, they also find something they didn't know they needed to let go of their past : love. A story about letting go of the things that hurt you and holding on to everything else. |
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SugaHoneyDip Joined: 2012-05-26 Posts: 1433 |
9 months ago
um yes i need sum ideas to continue my story with...please help @skylark698 I'm looking for an honest opinion on my story...I think it could be better...please check it out and COMMENT, FAN, VOTE if you like. I'll do the same for yours. WHAT IF EVERYTHING YOU KNEW WAS A LIE? http://www.wattpad.com/story/1623201-jezebel Genre: Fantasy #64 / Watty Awards 2012 #94 |
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_Mariahoniell7 Joined: 2012-01-13 Posts: 149 |
9 months ago
=D hi! I could use a critique to see if I should continue this story. |
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BiancaAlexisTaylor Joined: 2012-03-17 Posts: 4087 |
9 months ago
Could you give me an idea of how to continue? http://www.wattpad.com/5058636-straight-in-a-crooked-world The world as we see it...or maybe it should be the gays as we see them! In a world where the population is prominently gay heterosexuality can cause conflicts. It did for these two! A nobody at Solae High - Jason suddenly finds himself the center of unwanted attention when the people of his world find out his preference! Unbeknownst, pulled to an old friend- Ashlia and her to him...these two find themselves against the world of homosexuals. As if life was easy with Mason bullying Jason to no ends he now had to suffer the scrutiny of his friends and classmates for choosing someone inappropriate? But was it really? Pushed against a wall with no way to escape these two teenagers stand to fight back for the person they love and who love them back just the same...but will they succeed? |
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awesome4evah Joined: 2012-03-18 Posts: 5517 |
9 months ago
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ElectricAlligator Joined: 2012-01-23 Posts: 139 |
9 months ago
http://www.wattpad.com/story/1403696-guns-and-roses Title : Guns and Roses Genre: Romance/ Teen fiction Please could you critique for me ? Please note that there are some mild swear words used but nothing too bad because basically, this story is based on gang life and my main character Alexis is awfully rude ... LOL .. :) |
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Bubbles202 Joined: 2012-07-08 Posts: 11 |
9 months ago
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_HappyToBeWhoIAm Joined: 2012-04-11 Posts: 53 |
9 months ago
Could you please critique my story
Title: Hidden Side genre: werewolf/romance Chapter: 16 (ongoing) Plot: Anna White was known as the lonely 14 year old girl who kept to herself in her small town. With only her dad and a few friends, she really didn't have anyone who cared. When her dad goes missing and she starts to see changes in herself which aren't human.... |