I Will Critique Your Stories. (Very Blunt.)
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_InvaderVac
Joined: 2012-05-21Posts: 27610 months agoI will critique anyone's stories. I'm trying to be more open, so prepare for complete bluntness. Ok then, hit me with what ya got!
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MisterSuz
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Sweet_Brown1095
Joined: 2012-04-05Posts: 123810 months agoHey ive wrote a quick draft of a horror/short story http://www.wattpad.com/story/1567714-the-psycho-ex
ive recently started to write the prequel to this, ive only wrote the description for thisand would love ur advice and comments http://www.wattpad.com/story/1689012-the-psycho-girlfriend
thnx!!
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wishuponaword
Joined: 2012-07-18Posts: 410 months ago -
LandShark
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mysteria12345
Joined: 2012-06-29Posts: 13910 months agohttp://www.wattpad.com/story/1690537-the-world-that-never-was < Be as blunt as possible! :D Radian lives in a world where her whole life is planned out: from what she'll eat for breakfast to her future family. She has no say in her life, and how it will go. The Heads plan to make the world 'Perfect.' But Radian suspects something more: and she's willing to sacrifice everything to uncover it.
I know that it has basic language, and I'm editiing that when I've finished; and that is bears similarity to others...which I honestly didn't know :L
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_TheDarkestLight
Joined: 2011-10-06Posts: 3110 months agohttp://www.wattpad.com/story/1540425-the-last-hunt
Hunting meant everything to Ruin. It wasn't just his job; it was a way of life. Training his entire life to catch criminals. Slowly building a reputation as one of the best Bounty Hunters in the world, and finally joining the two best hunters in the world. Everything was perfect... Perfect things never last. Some despised the hunters, but one hated them above all. As his plan begins to unfold. Hunters become the hunted. Can Ruin and his friends save themselves and many others? Or will this be the last hunt? Thanks! Hope you enjoy!
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_SevenOddYears
Joined: 2012-05-27Posts: 11610 months agohttp://www.wattpad.com/story/1497848-a-momentary-lapse-of-reason
"Eventually you will die without your soul, Dante. And so will she, because no one is destined to have two souls. Surely not a mortal."
Believing his soul will keep her safe, Dante refuses to get it back. Fighting the solitude and emptiness he wanders earth alone with only one goal; staying away from her as far as possible.
But how long can you ignore the cries of your own heart?
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dreamsmadereal
Joined: 2012-01-25Posts: 311510 months ago@InvaderVac Here is mine! :)
Crash:http://www.wattpad.com/5337711-crash-prologue Genre:Humor/Teen Fiction- Bayleigh is a spoiled teenager living the life of luxury. Suddenly, her family loses everything. How will she be able to survive moving from a mansion into a trailer park, living right across the stree from one of her greatest enemies?
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SpeakingTruth
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OBEY_Tee
Joined: 2012-06-25Posts: 2710 months ago@InvaderVac hey,heres mine:) I just started it so. http://www.wattpad.com/story/1639449-i-am-me-that-is-all-i-could-ever-be be free to say whatever.idc:)
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IAmKatKilljoy
Joined: 2012-04-18Posts: 15410 months agohttp://www.wattpad.com/5383515-fights-bets-and-late-night-cigarettes-chapter-one
It's only two chapters. Thank you for doing this, and please, be harsh(:
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_InvaderVacJoined: 2012-05-21Posts: 27610 months ago
Done. @MisterSuz
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_InvaderVacJoined: 2012-05-21Posts: 27610 months ago
Done. And done. @Sweet_Brown1095
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_InvaderVacJoined: 2012-05-21Posts: 27610 months ago
Done. @wishuponaword Done. @LandShark Done. @mysteria12345 Done. @TheDarkestLight
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IndieFoxx
Joined: 2012-07-13Posts: 4210 months agohttp://www.wattpad.com/story/1685436-stories-from-underland
Wonderland is real. Well, it is to Violet anyway. It pulls her out of reality- an unstable life in Underland mental institution- and shows her the true wonders of insanity. These are the stories of her hallucinations, and an ongoing battle with mental illness, as she slowly but surely begins to lose her mind.
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_InvaderVacJoined: 2012-05-21Posts: 27610 months ago
Done. @SevenOddYears Done. @dreamsmadereal Done. @Ekstar
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_InvaderVacJoined: 2012-05-21Posts: 27610 months ago
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_InvaderVacJoined: 2012-05-21Posts: 27610 months ago
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_InvaderVacJoined: 2012-05-21Posts: 27610 months ago
Done. @IAmKatKilljoy
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SpeakingTruthJoined: 2012-03-15Posts: 157510 months ago
@InvaderVac You said there was potential and read it all.... one person read just one line and gave me a whole speech of hate, ill take your comment as a glimmer of hope
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BlueElmo
Joined: 2011-07-31Posts: 544510 months ago@InvaderVac it's a short story
You know that girl you called fat? She’s been starving herself for God knows how long.
You know that chick you called emo? She’s been battling depression for years.
You know that gal you bullied and whenever she would cry you would say “Aww is little Missy going to go cry to her mommy and daddy?” Her parents died a couple years ago and she’s still grieving their death.
The tiniest thing can hurt a person beyond words, but it can also shed light to a dark tunnel. This is Missy Vega’s story about loss, hurt, betrayal and hope.
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Solipsist
Joined: 2010-04-03Posts: 17910 months ago@InvaderVac Please help me make my story better. Thanks in advance! http://www.wattpad.com/story/1183614-breathe-under-water-shadows-of-the-night-1
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BlackOpsII
Joined: 2012-04-14Posts: 276510 months ago@InvaderVac Hey, mate. Kill me now!
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_InvaderVacJoined: 2012-05-21Posts: 27610 months ago
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