need help with fighting scene

i dont need help with the fighting scene itself, but i need stuff to describe the scaredness and the danger and the dark scene and the blood lol any suggestions?

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Blood and gore don't always make for a good fight scence, the trick is to describe simple attacks and blocks but quickly to make for a fast paced fight passage. To keep it tense, don't let the protagonist get all the lucky shots, they have to take a beating before either winning or losing depending on what happens next. Use "fast" adjectives, this just means words that have a sharp sound and metaphorically pack-a-punch.

If you are describing fearful blood and a dark setting, you have to be at either end of a spectrum: really bland and open that gives an immediate image 'His mangled body lay in a pool of his own dark blood, the bone visible through his shredded flesh and his gorged eye sockets oozing.' REALLY obvious. Or, the other end, vague, which makes the reader think about what they're reading about and opens up their imagination to a level thay can work with 'His damaged flesh lay in an unatural twisted shape, a dark pool growing around him. Flashes of white amongst the red brought sickness to the throat and his empty eye sockets still seemed to gaze wide in shock.' It's re-arranged but can you see the difference? It's easy to see in the first but you have to imagine the second on your own terms, the level of damage.

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:O Thanks that was goooood ;) I think I will edit my fighting scene in my book atm its rubbish haha ;D

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@ThePreciousKey This might help, written by some of Wattpads best =D

http://www.wattpad.com/forums/discussion/255758/Ok+boys%2C+how+to+write+action+fighting+scenes+.

http://www.wattpad.com/forums/discussion/161816/Writing+a+Fight+or+Battle+Scene...+How+to+Start

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well dark and fearful scenes are always full of description.I agree with Aabco7 and i think you already have a pretty good response =) The best thing to do is to visualize your character in that situation.Are they a girly girl?if so how do you think they'd be feeling doing something outside their comfort zone?Are they destined for danger? Remember to add rhetorical questions and read your paragraph out load.Can you see it in a book and is it very realistic?Take a look at some other scenes similar to what you hope to achieve and study their way of reading hope it helps

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