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  • Crimson613
    Crimson613
    2 years ago
  • MunazzaBangash
    MunazzaBangash
    2 years ago

    Hello, please critique the prologue of my romance novel 'Let it Fall' http://www.wattpad.com/5666350-let-it-fall-prologue Hope to hear from you soon.

    ~Munazza Bangash.

    Xoxoxox

  • AtomicToaster
    AtomicToaster
    2 years ago
  • booksandchocolates
    booksandchocolates
    2 years ago

    Thanks for your critique:D @WildRose393

  • PunkRockLuvr
    PunkRockLuvr
    2 years ago

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    Zeriella Ceylontera is a quiet, mysterious girl, depressed for reasons that she doesn't like talking about. She's been having trouble trusting anyone ever since that wretched night, and the walls she built around herself make it impossible for anyone to enter her life. But when he walks into her life she finds her walls crumbling down around her and there's nothing she can do to stop it.

    http://www.wattpad.com/story/1637027-my-sanity

    Critique away! I wanna improve my writing in all ways possible, and if that means some mean ass critiquing well then *shrugs* Go ahead :P And please don't just critique the first chapter and leave :) Try the others too. Hope you like it :) And thank you in advance xx

  • ListenToThePoets
    ListenToThePoets
    2 years ago
  • ii4oo49
    ii4oo49
    2 years ago
  • _AlexaFragile
    _AlexaFragile
    2 years ago

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    http://www.wattpad.com/story/1653378-flight

    In a world full of people different from herself, Elizabet just wants to explore and go on adventures - not stay cooped up at home and get married to some rich man. When her parent's abuse becomes too much to handle and a forced marriage looms on the horizon, her only option is to escape; but before long her flight finds her lost in a strange caravan and wrapped up in a world - and fight - bigger than her. Was home really the safest place after all?

  • _BiancaAlexisTaylor
    _BiancaAlexisTaylor
    2 years ago

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    http://www.wattpad.com/5058636-straight-in-a-crooked-world

    The world as we see it...or maybe it should be the gays as we see them! In a world where the population is prominently gay heterosexuality can cause conflicts. It did for these two! A nobody at Solae High - Jason suddenly finds himself the center of unwanted attention when the people of his world find out his preference! Unbeknownst pulled to an old friend- Ashlia and her to him...these to find themselves against the world of homosexuals. As if life was easy with Mason bullying Jason to no ends he now had to suffer the scrutiny of his friends and classmates for choosing someone inappropriate? But was it really? Pushed against a wall with no way to escape these two teenagers stand to fight back for the person they love and who love them back just the same...but will they succeed?

  • _imran_theauthor
    _imran_theauthor
    2 years ago
  • _Onyx15
    _Onyx15
    2 years ago

    @WildRose393 Please no sugar coating! I want the harsh truth 1506348-256-558284.jpg

    "You're a player, huh? So let's play a game. We'll hug, have fun, text, talk, kiss, do anything a couple does. And whoever falls inlove first, loses." Alone. Abused. Rejected. Troubled. And talented. After Dee was dumped by her boyfriend, Dee becomes unpopular and an outsider. To help her get through highschool she relieves her troubles though music. That's how she meets Dear Agony, a local rock band. After this, her life change forever including revenge, hate, love, and jealousy.

    Sorry I suck at discriptions give it a chance please!!!! 

  • Luna_Dreamer
    Luna_Dreamer
    2 years ago

    @WildRose393

    Hello all, my name is Luna_Dreamer. I am the author of Psycho Skills, Blue Eyes, The Rainbow Makers, and many more stories. I'd be very grateful if all who read this message could please read and comment on my stories. Also in Psycho Skills there is a chapter called Questions for the Readers. I really, really, need that read and answered as well. Links and summaries are below . Hope you enjoy. Thank you.

    Blue Eyes:

    I wasn't always hurt. I wasn't always this monster. Once everything was right. Once I was human.

    http://www.wattpad.com/story/1405912-blue-eyes

    Psycho Skills:

    Meet: David Nebro, a very intelligent high school graduate and five year college student who is only fourteen years of age. Margrett Morgonson, super genius in her youth as well as in her adult life and the last professor to David. Silvia Merrez, friend of the Morgonson sisters and detective currently working on a case to find and capture Psycho Sexist, the most deadly killer of their time. David has been taught for the past five years by Dr. Margrett Morgonson, professor of the college in the year 2000. Finally out of knowledge to give him she sends him to find her sister, his next teacher, who has secrets of her own, one being that she is Psycho Sexist.

    http://www.wattpad.com/story/1110321-psycho-skills

    Raven:

    This story takes place in a setting surrounded by war and wonder. For vampires don't have to drink blood. They can feed on human food and never fully be satisfied, but what will some choose? Will they be blood drinkers? Or will they be blood protectors? Consumed by war and surrounded by legend of angels and demons. How every 500 hundred years an angel flies down from heaven to be reborn as a human, and every thousand years a demon climbs up to be reborn as well. Is it true? Can the war be stopped? If it can't be stopped, can the right side prevail?

    http://www.wattpad.com/story/1548438-raven

  • Luna_Dreamer
    Luna_Dreamer
    2 years ago

    @WildRose393

    The Rainbow Makers:

    "War is upon you." The beautiful transparent wings of this creature dissappeared into its back. "No, it can't be." I didn't want to believe what was happening. "It is. I have been sent by the goddess to protect you and your kind. You cannot avoid this war. You will either kill to survive or die, but know you are not alone."

    When you think of what a Rainbow Maker might be, what do you think? Do you think of angels? Fairies? Imps? Well, a rainbow maker is similar to all of those, as well as different from each of them too. A rainbow maker would look no different from a human. In truth, there are few differences between the two. Rainbow Makers can use magic; a kind called life magic. Life magic is apart of what makes up every soul, so to an extent any creature can use life magic, but none more so than a rainbow maker. They may not give life to something that does not already possess it, but they can heal things and help them grow. What do you think would happen if the government found out that these creatures existed and were not limited by the same things that limit a human? If you wish to find out my answer, then this book is for you. Enjoy!

    http://www.wattpad.com/story/1635861-the-rainbow-makers

    Love Spark:

    Only one night out having fun with a friend when Lia finds herself stuck in a blind date with her friend, Mary as the matchmaker. When Lia sees him he's handsome. When she talks to him, he seems nice, but she has a boyfriend! Doing her best to refuse anything happening between the two, she gets lured into a dance. One dance, can't be that bad. Can it? She soon realizes the answer when they both discover a spark between them that neither thought was possible.

    http://www.wattpad.com/story/1654387-love-spark

  • Luna_Dreamer
    Luna_Dreamer
    2 years ago

    @WildRose393

    Dreams:

    Everyone has had a dream at one point or another. This is the story about mine. About how one person can make the biggest difference in the smallest of ways. The smallest of things can effect us the most. Never give up no matter what and to always have faith in the future. My name is Constance Nedrem and this is my story.

    http://www.wattpad.com/story/1661922-dreams

  • turnblue
    turnblue
    2 years ago

    @WildRose393 SHORT STORY entered for Watty Awards 2012 so comments & votes are appreciated :)

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    You know that girl you called fat? She’s been starving herself for God knows how long.

    You know that chick you called emo? She’s been battling depression for years.

    You know that gal you bullied and whenever she would cry you would say “Aww is little Missy going to go cry to her mommy and daddy?” Her parents died a couple years ago and she’s still grieving their death.

    The tiniest thing can hurt a person beyond words, but it can also shed light to a dark tunnel. This is Missy Vega’s story about loss, hurt, betrayal and hope.