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I believe the title says it all only the first 7 stories will be acknowledged

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@Blindinglights Here are mine! Thanks so much!

BSOL- Book One of the Angel Series: http://www.wattpad.com/story/932892-bsol-the-first-book-in-the-angel-series Genre: Science Fiction/Teen fic-In the year 2020, Essy has already faced divorce, death, and the many horrors of WWIII. But suddenly, everything starts to become perfect... Too Perfect. Through all the deception and lies, Essy knows that she has been taken someplace that is definitely not earth...

KrawL: http://www.wattpad.com/story/1403589-krawl Genre: Horror/Teen Fiction- Gianna lives on Murdock Street with but one other place, a science lab where they are conducting experiments to make "Superbugs", which go horribly wrong, making them become flesh eating monsters. This is the story of when those monsters escaped. (Horror #11!!)

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@Blindinglights Would love some honest feedback if you're still taking stories. Thanks ahead of time.

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http://www.wattpad.com/story/819469-rain-a-zombie-apocalypse-story

I don't know how to do the cover thing : 3 haha

But I'd really appreciate the critique. Thanks in advance :D

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http://www.wattpad.com/story/1488406-the-visitors

Lieutenant General Everett Riley is chosen from a slew of opponents to experimentally pilot the S.A.C., a spaceship designed for travel amongst the galaxies. Everything goes smoothly, until the engines begin to fail, and the two other passengers begin losing faith in their pilot. The crew is stranded in the Milky-Way galaxy, and is forced to crash-land on an alien planet, called "Earth". The last thing they want to do is be stuck there forever, but what happens when Everett begins to fall in love with a simple Earthling? Will he choose her, or his home?

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A Fantasy/Adventure story in progress

http://www.wattpad.com/story/1515594-a-tale-of-fire

advice is greatly appreciated

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http://www.wattpad.com/story/1540425-the-last-hunt

Life is good for Ruin. It was a small pack, but the best Hunters around. Tensions ran high, and the pack went from three to two, and if that wasn't enough someone was killing all of the best Shifters... The Hunt is on, but who is the hunter... and who is being hunted?

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http://www.wattpad.com/story/1421905-hunger-it%27s-my-whole-life-now

Jayne was a 14 year old girl living in the heart of Massachusetts, the big city of Boston, obviously not as big as New York but it was all she knew, Jayne had many friends and family that loved her, she was close to every single one of them, except they don’t know the awful secret she is hiding, Jayne is a anorexic/bulimic, she hate’s food, never liked it once, she shy’s away from people while their eating in fear of being sucked in, on the rare time that she does eat she can’t keep it down, like her body is made to throw up after meals, once her family finds out about what she has been up to can they save her, or is Jayne way beyond repair?

Hey if you don't mind checking this out and letting me know what you think that would be amazing, when you get the time, i am sure your busy.

thanks for the time

And one ast thing, if you could comment on the story that would be more helpful, because i am most likely to forget about this and not check, it, if that is not too much to ask, thanks again <3

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Is it too late to read the 10th story? Also, the title doesn't really say "First 7 stories" like you said. And, this currently only has one chapter (and 4 pages) so it's not much of a chore to read this. The link below will lead you to the summary of my story if you change your mind...

Royal Aunty Danielle

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http://www.wattpad.com/story/1554788-bloom http://www.wattpad.com/story/1359138-the-hunting feeback on either or both would be appreciated.

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The Last Shapeshifter

A new girl moves to a new town and doesn't know about her heritage. Or that her family once lived there. All she knows is that her mother will not tell her what's happening. The strange people in her town giving her weird looks. But when strange things start happening she starts to learn.

http://www.wattpad.com/story/1545157-the-last-shapeshifter

Thanks:)

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