**I will critique your story!!!**

I'm not an expert on critiquing but I read A LOT and I'll use that knowledge when writing a critique. I'll be brutally honest in my small critique and I'll do it for how ever many chapters it is of MY story that you comment for! So post away!

http://www.wattpad.com/story/1362380-life-as-i-know-it

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@Kudz117 Hey! :) Here's the link to my story: http://www.wattpad.com/1921349-the-dragon-tattoo Summary: Carra. A normal sixteen-to be year old girl. With the hormones and all. Imagine her shock when her typical normal life goes downhill. Let me rephrase- undergoes major alterations (which she REALLY doesn't need. Or want.) Because soon to be sixteen year old girls don't control the "fire" element now,do they? And they don't uncover intriguing lands? Or perhaps, a particular land called "Pyropia". With a sardonic boy who goes all out to irritate you to death. Oh,and a geek with onion breath. And braces. And specs. And oh!,puberty voice. Things are not looking up. And they get only worse when Carra discovers that it is up to her to fulfill prophecy and save this mysterious place. From a HOT,basses evil villain who wants her to join his troop. AND promises her that she'll finally be able to meet her parents,when all these almost-sixteen years she had thought they were dead corpses. Things suck for her right now. But will she cave into the alluring promises of darkness? Or will she stand up and save the world? The choice is hers. But,one choice decides the future of the world. Thank-you! I'll get to your's ASAP.

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Is this a good story Plot, if not can you guys help me make it into a better one. Fix the grammar punctuation, take things out that might not need to be there.

Everything seems to be going as planned on Evangeline Axles’ schedule. She scored only the hottest job in her town as a manager at one of the new International Hot Topic stores. She finally got every girl in her high school’s dream guy, Peyton Stevens as her boyfriend. She is going to one of the top colleges in the fall, but for right now she’s going to kick back and let her amazing summer go by. Things take a spin when her old friend Jake comes back to town as one of the employees at her job. Jake now goes by Chazz, for some reason. Chazz use to be such a sweet, shy, quiet little boy; And of course Evangeline had the world's biggest crush on him. Talking to him again she finds out he is nothing like that anymore. He parties all night and every night. He is now somebody with no deep perception of life, He does drugs/smokes/drinks, He only lives for his own satisfaction, and He has empathy for other people, and enjoys humiliating or hurting their feelings for his own pleasure. He has even been to jail 2 times. At first, she wants nothing to do with Chazz, but after numerous conversations with him she can’t stop herself from thinking about Chazz and old times. Will Evangeline mess her love, education opportunities, and everything she is looking forward to for this guy with no future, even after she finds out that Chazz has a very violent side.

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@Kudz117 Here's mine: http://www.wattpad.com/story/1471929-the-devil%27s-angel Off to yours :)

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http://www.wattpad.com/4129318-living-with-the-mix-twilight-fanfiction-a-meeting

Of to yours now, can you do my first chapter and my last two chapters please i will comment and vote on 3 of your chapters as you will be doing 3 of mine :) Thanks

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http://www.wattpad.com/5069039-her-cinderella-story-first-book-in-the-her-story

Is it okay if i vote three of your chappy's and you comment on three of mine? :)

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@Kudz117 hi i have commented and voted on three of yours and i have added it to my libary it is really good and i love it will read the next chapter tomorow as i need sleep :)

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@Kudz117 I read two chapters :)

http://www.wattpad.com/5058636-straight-in-a-crooked-world

In a world, where the population is prominently gay, three teenagers need to face the conflicts associated with their heterosexuality. Jason, a nobody at Solae High School, sudden;y becomes the center of attention and he doesn't like this. Along with this sudden attention comes disappointment from his mothers, and bulling at school. How would you feel if the tables were turned, and you were socially rejected for loving who you love?The second chapter was uploaded today.

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http://www.wattpad.com/4955896-impossible-love-chapter-one

Jessica Brooke was popular, not only in her class but throughout the school. Most of the students knew her as the captain of cheerleading squad. She has pretty much everything that most teenagers would kill for. Her life changed brutally after a horrible car crash. She lost her family. So with no where to go, she moved to her aunt's house and discovered that she can hear what others can not - people's thoughts -. She has been branded a freak at her new high school - but everything changes when a new student arrives - Damon Carter

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@Kudz117 Hi, I am just going to say this nicely but you need to edit the first post and remove the voting thing because a wattpad person will come and close down the thread because vote trading is forbidden. I just wanted to warn you because I hate to see people get into trouble!!

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@Kudz117

http://www.wattpad.com/5001846-leaving-the-kingdom-of-childhood

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@blackmagick @Angel22222 @TKAnez @BubblegumPops2oe @chippey @livelovelaugh331 @Maarine @PerfectlyAverage Hey guys! I had a wedding to attend this weekend and I have some family visiting from out of town! I'll get to your stories tomorrow, for sure :) thanks for your patience and dont worry, I will critique your stories :p

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@Kudz117 ok thanks :)

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@BubblegumPops2oe Done :)

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@TKAnez Completed :P

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@chippey Did yours! :)

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@PerfectlyAverage Finsished :D

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@livelovelaugh331 Done :p

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@blackmagick @Angel22222 @Maarine As soon as I see your comments I'll head on over to your stories :)

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@Kudz117 Thank you :)

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http://www.wattpad.com/story/1082818-her-shadow

ORIGINALLY TITLED THE STREET GAMES “‘The innocent, little virgin always falls for the hot bad boy.’ ‘Well then, I guess this story is a little different now, isn’t it, pretty boy?’ I smirked at him, glowing proudly for the fact I didn’t stutter. He just smirked back, while mine dropped, he approached me, his hand latched onto my waist and pulled me towards him, my breath got caught in my throat, his other hand went to my shoulder, and then to in front my face, dangling in front of me from Blake’s hand was the biggest, scariest, and hairiest spider I had ever seen. And I did the only thing I would do. I panicked, screamed, and ran fifty feet away from the two beasts. “ Hi. My name is Noel Harris and my goal in life is to show the jerk-faced, arrogant Blake Wood that I’m not just some innocent, little virgin who will fall for his looks. How, you ask? Well, by getting into deep shit. Street Games look out for your newest addition of a player.

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www.wattpad.com/story/628412-my-suicide-buddy

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@Maarine Done :)

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bump!

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