Free Constructive Criticism: CLOSED

I've been on wattpad for a while now, but I haven't been really active. So I figured I'd look for some reads seeing as I need to bulk up my library. This is a free read, the first ten will get constructive criticism from me. After the first ten post their stories here, I'll mark this as closed, and when I'm finished giving their reviews I'll mark this open again, and the next ten can get their constructive criticism.

I try not to sugar coat anything, but I'm not the world's harshest criticizer either. I'll give you my honest opinion as well as what I liked and didn't like about it.

Attention: I may not get it up today, but I will get it up by the end of this week.

to do:
@Fanganator @dreamsmadereal @FancyOtter @MadiWhitWilsonK @Menmma @xMidniteLuVx @Solipsist @marinam @SEscuadro @TheSuperGirl @Ujurak321 @JasmeetSingh9 @imran_theauthor @Lakynor @PerrineSowl @Symrun @Filddlesticks @loviedovy12 @CarsonFaircloth @theblindsilence @evelina_sterigoi97 @ninjapotato

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Will you please critique my story? Just choose :))

http://www.wattpad.com/story/1165312-the-mystery-of-the-killing-wolf or http://www.wattpad.com/story/1276514-burnt

Salamat

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Hey, I'd love if you could critique the first chapter of my Hunger Games fan fiction, The Twelfth Time :)

http://www.wattpad.com/4372536-the-twelfth-time-chapter-one

Thanks, DM.

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I look forward to your thoughts on my new story for the Watty Awards. It's rather long, so it's fine if you only have time to tackle the first few chapters. Here it is:

http://www.wattpad.com/story/1272872-snowed-watty-awards-2012

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Title: A Summer Song

Plot: After the classes ended, a seventeen-year-old student named Belle Collins gone home from the city. One day, Belle was sent into a music school to learn more how to play guitar and she found her crush at that school. In the end, they discovered that their father loves another girl and their mother has cancer. This is a story of forgiveness and second chances.

Simply click the picture to read! :D

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@SUNDAYSTORMS

http://www.wattpad.com/story/962211-little-n-large-watty-awards-2012

Nicole Crystal Welsh is starting her sophomore year at her California performing Arts school with the best social status possible- a floater. Someone popular enough to hang with the popular crowd yet still have the ability to sit with newbies or freshmen. In a place where looks are everything Nicole is beyond satisfied with her position when the inevitable happens- girl meets boy. Floaters are usually loners but Nicole is popular enough to make it work, that's not the issue. The problem is Caleb is a whopping 5'6 and Nicole is 6'1. In a place where looks are everything Nicole must find the strength to break the cookie cutter mold or lose everything she's ever worked for with a few bumps along the way.

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I'd llove to kow what you think :)

http://www.wattpad.com/story/1161575-one-plus-one-equals-love

Thanks :)

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How To Annoy Leslie - Currently Horror #87 / Humor #330 on what's hot lists! Don't worry it's not scary (: Katie and Lauren are determined to kill Leslie, a terrible beast of a girl who has always lived, to everyone's regret that is. Will they every kill her? Read to find out in this Horror filled Humor Book! Now Completed (: http://www.wattpad.com/story/1275598-how-to-annoy-leslie

How To Be A Murderer - Book 2 of How To Annoy Leslie Series - Currently Horror #97 / Humor #349 on what's hot lists! Also not scary (: The sequel to the fun filled murderous story of Lauren and Katie trying to attempt to kill their friend! They've done it the first time, but can they do it again... in the afterlife? Find out in this Humor filled Horror book! http://www.wattpad.com/story/1279665-how-to-be-a-murderer

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I FOUND MYSELF IN WONDERLAND AGAIN

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Title: I Found Myself in Wonderland Again
Genre: Fantasy, Adventure
Rating: [PG]
Summary:
♞Wonderful they say. Is Wonderland really wonderful? Alice Liddell, now 17, is dragged back to Wonderland where she discovers that Wonderland is real and is not a figment of her imagination. The real Alice is back and the Wonderlanders’ hope returns that they are saved from the crutches of the Red Queen. Meanwhile the Kingdom of Hearts and the Kingdom of Diamonds joined forces and are out to get Alice. The Red Queen pays the Other Alice to assassinate her. As the Kingdom of Hearts and Diamonds gain power with each passing day, Wonderland is slowly crumbling apart. With the Red Queen and the Other Alice hot on her trail, whatever will Alice do? And as the prophecy says, there can only be one Alice. Which Alice will survive? Enter the twisting tale where Lewis Caroll’s class Alice’s Adventures in Wonderland meets American McGee’s Alice. ♘ @SUNDAYSTORMS

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http://www.wattpad.com/story/732347-the-chance-she-didn%27t-have

Please read and tell me what you think of my story called ' The chance she didn't have'. It will be really appreciated, please and thanks.

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If you have time, thanks :)

http://www.wattpad.com/story/1102941-something-about-summer

All Raine Evans wanted was a peaceful summer. Instead, she's stuck in a ridiculous challenge, and partnered with her worst enemy, and best friend's brother, Kaden Fleming.

It's Boys VS Girls and the loser will have to be the winner's slave for the rest of the summer. But Raine loathes Kaden and is certain she won’t be able to survive even a day being his slave.

Which means she’ll have to win the challenge- no matter what.

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I shall comment soon, but it might take some time!

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@NicholasStillman completed!

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@twinklehaze finished critiquing!

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@SUNDAYSTORMS thank you for helping me

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Halfway done guys! Sorry this is taking so long!

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@tangledsparks Sorry for the SUPER!Late review, but I finished!

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@awesome4evah finished your review! Sorry it was so late!

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The Boy on the Other Side of the Street

http://www.wattpad.com/story/1190394-the-boy-on-the-other-side-of-the-street

Abigail Richerson. In her past, she had a crush on the most coolest boy in school--Connor Swift--but at that time, she was an outcast. When her crush was about to leave to Miami, she asks what he feels towards her. Unfortunately, he does not feel the same. On top of that, he insults her! One year later, Abigail is having the time of her life in high school. She's consider pretty, nice, and a boy-hater. One day, when Abigail was taking a stroll, she sees Connor Swift standing on the other side of the street! She soon finds out that Connor is staying in South Carolina and will be attending her school. Since she is afraid of him exposing her past, she makes a bet with him. A bet that will change her life...

The Birds of PreyS

http://www.wattpad.com/story/1306931-birds-of-preys

“The Eximius’s numbers are decreasing… I think we are on the brink of extinction.” Elizabeth or Lizzy Imholz is having her 15th birthday party soon. She's delighted that she could finally get her permit and live a normal life like any teenager. But the moment when she officially becomes 15, she can understand what birds say?!?!?! Thinking that she has become paraniod, Avery Miller and Hoag Flanagan enters her life and turns her world upside down...even more. They say that, they are the Eximius or Birds of PreyS and that she is the white leporem that Lord Hanz wants.

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http://www.wattpad.com/story/1025369-knowing-you%27re-there Knowing You're There : Xylia Thomas has always tried to fit in with everyone else. But there's one feature that sets her apart from the rest of the crowd: she's blind. The few friends she has are in relationships, and she longs to find love. That's when she meets Kurt, and knows she has found everything in a guy she could possibly dream of- a best friend, band mate, and soul mate.

Isla and the Genie: http://www.wattpad.com/3248774-isla-and-the-genie (1 Page short story) Isla is on a vacation, not enjoying herself. She accidentally stumbles upon a genie bottle on the beach,and is given more than she could ever wish for.

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Title: Lost to Lovely

[Completed]

http://www.wattpad.com/story/954882-lost-to-lovely

[Trigger warning: mild boyxboy] Two boys. Different problems. One solution. Run. Theo Jennings in just another lowly hybrid. After months of abuse and torment from his previous owner he's found himself back at the pound. When a sleazy bum opts to adopt him, Theo hasn't the slightest clue his life is about to make a turn for the worse. Jacques Monroe is a pampered rich kid. His father is strict and abusive. When one day his father does something that will make Jacques never look at him the same way again, Jacques makes a snap decision. With a slip of fate and a risky decision, the two boys meet. Their friendship is grand, maybe even a little bit more. But with ghosts of their past on their tail and the cruel eyes of society judging their every move, the boy's relationship is threatened. Will their relationship survive? Or better yet, will they?

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He said people were after him. He said he loved her. Then he said to forget their time together and move on with her life. That wasn't happening. Three years have passed since Leigh emerged from the house with a note from Luke, and finally Leigh is able to see him. With enough money for a round trip ticket to what she vaguely recognizes as his new home, she sets off on a reckless mission to find her childhood friend. However, the tearful reunion that she imagines is far from what she receives when Leigh finds herself caught up in something she doesn't understand while being pursued by unknown enemies.

http://www.wattpad.com/story/1330524-ripped

If you are still doing critiques, I'd sure love one. :D Also, I'd appreciate it in PM form if at all possible? XD

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@MadiWhit Sure, still doing critiques :D And no problem!

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@SUNDAYSTORMS Yay! :D

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@SUNDAYSTORMS If you are still critiquing, then can you check out mine:

The Heart of Arabia

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