Criticism 101; CLOSED!~ [Closing Remarks inside, please do read]

http://www.wattpad.com/story/1240212-fading-howls

http://www.wattpad.com/story/1233145-to-hell-with-popularity

Thanks! xD

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http://www.wattpad.com/story/1254487-uptown-girl

When Lila Parks was seventeen she ran away. After facing heartbreak whilst being humiliated she flees Park City to New York leaving behind her social worker and people whom she thought were her friends. With the help of hotel heiress, Christine Bellham she managed to snag a scholarship at NYU and a place to live. Eight years later and going by the name Lila Emmerson she's now a blossoming journalist with a bright future ahead of her. The rest of Manhattan doesn't know what she's been through and she intends to keep it that way. But when unexpected things return from the past, she feels herself slipping from the ultimate Uptown Girl status she worked so hard for.

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I look forward to your thoughts on the first 1-2 chapters of my story:

http://www.wattpad.com/story/1272872-snowed

Description: "The future North America has a way of cleaning out its least successful plebeians--by taking their money, then their lives. A strange entrepreneur with an unearthly talent for marksmanship offers his clients a timelier means of escape."

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http://www.wattpad.com/story/1067491-twin-flames

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Hey I'd love for you to critique my story. I especially hope you enjoy reading it. Please, if your are going to read only one chapter, read Awkward Moment No. 1: Getting caught spying behind a skip.Tell me if it makes sense. Thanks for wanting to do this! http://www.wattpad.com/4195230-do-it-like-a-dude-awkward-moment-no-1-getting

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@teeeyaruhh I would love it if you would critique my story. The Legend of Irene http://www.wattpad.com/story/256314-the-legend-of-irene What happens when your insane father forces you to enter a dangerous competition in order to save your mother's life? Would you accept or become a slave? Thanks!

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Title: A Summer Song

Plot: After the classes ended, a seventeen-year-old student named Belle Collins gone home from the city. One day, Belle was sent into a music school to learn more how to play guitar and she found her crush at that school. In the end, they discovered that their father loves another girl and their mother has cancer. This is a story of forgiveness and second chances.

Simply click the picture to read! :D

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http://www.wattpad.com/story/1251791-the-lost-dreamer

When fifteen-year-old Eden Paris discovers that not only is she not human but rather, a descendant of gods and angels, a demiangel, she is plunged into the world of the Ethereal Society, a society of the higher half-bloods. Eden is determined to sever herself from the world she thought only existed in books and fairytales but it seems that the only way to get out of the mess her Scent caused her was to tie herself to the handsome yet intolerable and haughty young William Sage as his Consor, a warrior sworn by blood and soul to protect his other to death. Something stirs outside of the protective barrier of the Sanctuary. More and more demiangels have been reported kidnapped and hadn't been discovered nor heard from anyone. When Eden learns that her best friend is in grave danger, she is drawn deeper into the secrets of the Hidden World. In this adventure packed novel, Eden learns that some things are rather much better off hidden under the covers of her books.

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http://www.wattpad.com/story/1062991-one-moment-prequel thanks! @teeeyaruhh

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Title: Lost to Lovely

http://www.wattpad.com/story/954882-lost-to-lovely

"[Trigger warning: boyxboy] Two boys. Different problems. One solution. Run.

Theo Jennings in just another lowly hybrid. After months of abuse and torment from his previous owner he's found himself back at the pound. When a sleazy bum opts to adopt him, Theo hasn't the slightest clue his life is about to make a turn for the worse. Jacques Monroe is a pampered rich kid. His father is strict and abusive. When one day his father does something that will make Jacques never look at him the same way again, Jacques makes a snap decision. With a slip of fate and a risky decision, the two boys meet. Their friendship is grand, maybe even a little bit more. But with ghosts of their past on their tail and the cruel eyes of society judging their every move, the boy's relationship is threatened. Will their relationship survive? Or better yet, will they?"

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@teeeyaruhh Love, Life and Secret Agents, please?

Genre: Teen Fiction/Romance/Suspense/Well, it’s about spies so …

Thanks.

~V

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http://www.wattpad.com/4522420-change-cut-ties Be honest as you want. I swear on my Inkie soul that I shall not send you hate mail or cry.

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Just came back. Two months of internet? I thought I wouldn't be able to survive those two months.

Anyway, I'm taking down the requests one by one. Thanks for posting! :)

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Read up to Xx_Satchfire_xX's story. Going to continue critiquing, maybe later? Or tomorrow?

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http://www.wattpad.com/story/1190394-the-boy-on-the-other-side-of-the-street

Abigail Richerson. In her past, she had a crush on the most coolest boy in school--Connor Swift--but at that time, she was an outcast. When her crush was about to leave to Miami, she asks what he feels towards her. Unfortunately, he does not feel the same. On top of that, he insults her! One year later, Abigail is having the time of her life in high school. She's consider pretty, nice, and a boy-hater. One day, when Abigail was taking a stroll, she sees Connor Swift standing on the other side of the street! She soon finds out that Connor is staying in South Carolina and will be attending her school. Since she is afraid of him exposing her past, she makes a bet with him. A bet that will change her life...

The Birds of PreyS

http://www.wattpad.com/story/1306931-birds-of-preys

“The Eximius’s numbers are decreasing… I think we are on the brink of extinction.” Elizabeth or Lizzy Imholz is having her 15th birthday party soon. She's delighted that she could finally get her permit and live a normal life like any teenager. But the moment when she officially becomes 15, she can understand what birds say?!?!?! Thinking that she has become paraniod, Avery Miller and Hoag Flanagan enters her life and turns her world upside down...even more. They say that, they are the Eximius or Birds of PreyS and that she is the white leporem that Lord Hanz wants.

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Please read my story, " I Learned Something"..... Thanks

http://www.wattpad.com/story/909211-i-learned-something

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Hello, my name is Cameron Wilson. And I have a secret, I just really wanna love someone, experience the joys of having a soul mate not some crazy blond bimbo who wants to get in my pants. I sound pathetic don’t I? Well Leo would have said that if he heard me. But this is my secret you guys won’t tell anyone right? RIGHT?

Critique mine please :)

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@teeeyaruhh I'd really appreciate it :)

http://www.wattpad.com/4069370-do-it-for-the-girl-chapter-1

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I would love some critique - http://www.wattpad.com/story/1401095-rewrite So far, it's not paranormal and I'm not intending to write one. I'm going to keep everything science-fiction and I'll explain everything in science (: I'd really appreciate it if you checked it out :)

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@teeeyaruhh http://www.wattpad.com/4477061-shadows-in-the-moonlight

These are a few of my poems that i am thinking about trying to get published, please read and critique if you have the time:)

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@MykaelaDaniels @JennaJenners @NicholasStillman @IlseVrensburg @LondonToTokyo @LondonToTokyo @sgeunqk @_itsyoungalfred @SEscuadro @gisellelives @FancyOtter @Vaichi10 @Liren_Jamoon @Fanganator @novelsfreak @HoboMuffins @KuroLady @KerridwensLavender

I'll be sending those critiques.. maybe after a week? Just not as soon as you hope it to be. Please do understand that I need to read what seems like thousands of stories. Believe me, it really seems that way. Be patient guys! Thanks!

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@awesome4evah Still need my critiquing? From the looks of it, it already seems like you're doing a great job yourself.

@GottaReadMe @dreamsmadereal @Lowraine @LeilaStar @CreativeLizzy93 @MarieViolette @iRawr_ @Poindexter @RichelleNgo @ChloePxx @jadeofdiamonds @Rebeccaa @Tiye13 @Enprix @Newgenwriter431 @theseasdaughter @DeathNoteNinja @FairyLiquid @killer22

As you guys could see, the requests are piling up. I'd send those critiques to you ASAP.

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@teeeyaruhh

Title: Glittery Dust

Genre: Romance, Teen Fiction

Link: http://www.wattpad.com/story/1381098-glittery-dust-ongoing-series

Summary: In an unexpected scene, Farah Alcantara met Nathan Young, a cocky, arogant boy who thought only for himself. By his side, she’d experience something Shaun Moreau never let her experience; to finally be out of her shell and into reality. She’d be on an adventure she’d never forget; feeling happiness, sorrow, love and pain from small things. Unfortunately, fate had a new twist for them. Will Farah be able to weigh a high school friend over a childhood friend?

Here's mine. :)

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@teeeyaruhh hey! plz critique my story?

this is not paranormal:P

SAVE ME?

http://www.wattpad.com/4745320-save-me

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@teeeyaruhh

http://www.wattpad.com/story/1166614-the-war-of-the-mortals-watty-award-2012

http://www.wattpad.com/story/1166614-the-war-of-the-mortals-watty-award-2012

comment t on the comment section .please don't pm me ur comment

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