Claiming Justice (SAOF-needs major editing)

I am not sure I am happy with the way this story has gone.....the first part of the story I think should remain the basic same but I think It needs a revamp! I redo and a little change with storyline....Her dad will still be bad guy and they will still come ofter her but I want to change it a little...so let me know what u think because oas of the voting thing I did this story only recieved 4 votes which tells me it is not a good story and needs to be redone.