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Crimson Dawn: Darklife Saga

This is the first chapter of my vampire novel Crimson Dawn. Parts of it have been posted before but my ex deleted it, so here it is. I will post more if enough people want to read more.


Chapter 1

Crunch! I looked down at the broken glass under my foot, and took a quick glance back at the sleeping man sprawled across the bed .
Good, still asleep. The last thing I needed was for Michael...Mitch...Mathew...whatever his name is, to wake up while I was trying to make a smooth getaway before the sun got too high in the sky.
While the night before proved to be very entertaining for us both, I wasn't looking for anything beyond a one-night stand. And as my luck would have it, I picked a guy that liked to cuddle after sex and actually talk about his feelings, most of which involved us getting to know each other better. Yeah--I'll pass. While the sex was good I had my doubts that it was worth all this. Now I know that may sound rather whorish, but most vampires don't see promiscuity as such a bad thing. Pain and pleasure go hand in hand for us: they increase our chances of having successful feedings. Humans don't tend to take a few missing pints so bad if they've had an incredible night of sex the day before.
So does maintaining our anonymity. To make sure I kept my own, I placed a few mental blocks in said cuddle bunny's mind, ie. glamour. Just to make sure he wouldn't show up at my favorite Xtras club The Den looking for me later. The next time he saw me he would vaguely remember me as some chick he thought he went to high school with. The blocks wouldn't mean shit though if I couldn't get out of the house without accidentally waking him. I'd go from last night's thrill to trespassing burglar. Not high on my 'to do' list.
Fortunately with a little burst of vamp speed I was out of the house and into my car in a manner of seconds. Kicking myself the entire way for carelessly knocking over the glass in the first place. No sooner than I shut the door my cell phone started to ring. A quick glance told me that it was my roommate. "Yeah, this is Val, talk."
Irulan huffed on the other end. "Valeria you've really got to work on your phone etiquette, you have all the social graces of a sloth. "
I shrugged my shoulders and pulled my burgundy Fusion into traffic. "I knew it was you Ire, so why bother with the pleasantries?"
Instead of the snappy comeback I expected, I heard nothing but silence. Irulan took too long to answer. On top of that she covered the phone with her hand and lowered her voice to a whisper. God, I hoped she didn't have some girl in the bed with her while she was fussing at me. The last thing I needed was to be berated in front of her flavor of the week.
"Gee thanks", she said when she finally decided to respond. You really know how to make a girl feel special. I was just calling to make sure you were awake and on the way home, it's getting close to eight. I know you're pureblood and all, but you're still young in vamp years. You need to be in before the sun gets to high in the sky."
"Nah Ma, you think?" No matter how many times I make it home before the sun completely rises, she never lets me forget the one time that I didn't. To be honest, I think it scared her more than it scared me. I got off relatively easy... just a three month long tan. I've seen other vampires my age take a few years to heal similar sun damage. It's one of the few injuries that our bodies don't heal almost instantly. Granted, their blood might not have been as pure as my own.
"I'm already in the car and headed home on Tyvola, I'll see you in ten minutes." Irulan was obviously satisfied with my answer because she hung up without saying goodbye. Now who needed lessons in phone etiquette?
I live in the southern United States, Charlotte, N.C. to be precise. Charlotte, became one of the "it" destination for Xtras after the Awakening. The city was large enough to support us and allow us to blend in, yet small enough and deep enough in the south that the humans here hadn't lost their belief in all things otherworldly. They weren't quite as jaded as the rest of North America thus; they were a little more welcoming.
So much so that there are, at least four suburbs here aimed strictly at Xtras. Irulan and I lived in one called Emerald City. Yeah I know, but I didn't name the place I just live here. The last time I checked the census we were the fastest growing minority in Charlotte.
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tsutton
tsutton

4 weeks ago
ok you need to stop this im just a sad pathetic human not able to stop readin ill have to finish this later i really need to get something posted up c u later
sakura45
sakura45

3 months ago
I love your story it's quite interesting. I was wondering if when you get the chance could u plz read mine. It's called Angel of Darkness. I really want to know what you think of it okay. SO that way I can become a better writer. 
Carlinie
Carlinie

3 months ago
I love the story. I'm hooked. I have noticed some grammar and spelling problems though, but that's all. 
No-Idea
No-Idea

3 months ago
haha lolness!!
Foxxy89
Foxxy89

3 months ago
So lately I've been up to reading some vampire stories and I must say yours is different from the ones I've read. I'm really getting into it and I like seeing your version of vampires. This chapter was long but it was great and kept me reading nonstop. Can't wait to see what comes along next!
Egyptian_Jade
Egyptian_Jade

3 months ago
I'm so happy that I wanted to return the favor by reading one of yours. I've always had a thing for vampires. And the maturity of this turns me on to it even more. Can't wait to move on to the next chapter!
Hathor422
Hathor422

3 months ago
@kissmehunni Hey. Thats fine.  Valeria is a sentinel, kinda like a cop for the extras community.  And yes humans know about them.  Everything you asked is explained in the first chapter I think.
kissmehunni
kissmehunni

3 months ago
Heyyyyyyyy. I want you to know that I've started reading this..But the part is sooooooooooooo long that I will have to read the rest tomorrow.. I'm kind of confused. I don't get what her job is, why her father and brother are there and whether the humans know about the vampires? The Extra's? huuh, I'm confuseeeeeeeeeeed! :P xx
Hathor422
Hathor422

3 months ago
Thanks alot LeeLee, Ebonie and chicana_chic25.  Thanks for the positive feedback.  This story so far is the first draft.  It's totally unedited and my baby.  I've been writing this manuscript for almost 3 years now.  I put it down and come back to it, get sidetracked with other stories (I stopped to write UnBound...wrote that entire manuscript in less than 4 months), but it's almost done.

So again, thanks everyone.  Once I'm done I'm gonna go back, reread, and do any rewrites.
chicana_chic25
chicana_chic25

3 months ago
I have to agree with the others. There are so many stories I have read that have not met my standards of what a story should be. You had a few grammatical errors however, that's natural. I was very impressed with how intelligent you sounded through your story. It has the structure a story needs and that so many others are lacking. Good luck!
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Hathor422
by Hathor422
Apr 15, 2010 - 10 pages, Part 1 of 26 complete.png
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When pureblood vampire Valeria Trumaine returned home one morning to find her father Hadrian standing in her living room, she knew she was about to get trouble in spades. What she didn't expect was the trouble would come in the form of her ex Tristan Meriwether, vampire playboy and son of the regions vampire master.

After she left him, Valeria avoided Tristan like the plague, but now that he's gone rogue, she's going to have to utilize every thing she's learned as a sentinel to find him.

Finding Tristan proves to be more dangerous than anyone realized. He's changed in ways that go against nature, and has become more powerful than anyone ever imagined. Refusing to let her face the abomination that Tristan has become alone, Val's best friend and powerful Sidhe princess, Irulan joins the hunt. Valeria will find that Irulan's motives for keeping her safe aren't what she thinks. And soon she's faced with an undeniable attraction that makes her question everything she knew about herself.

Can she accomplish her task and prevent more innocent lives from being destroyed? Can she do it and not loose herself to his madness? In the middle of all the madness, can she embrace the unexpected love that fate has thrown her way?
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