Hunger Games Fan-Fiction Competition

I like your idea for the Quell, it is interesting and I like it.

Positives:

~ I like the opening paragraphs. The dream is interesting.

~ I like how it’s illegal to swim in District 4, that’s a cool idea to add.

~ I like how she is forced into it for being a criminal...( swimming in District 4)

~ I like the creepiness of the other tribute.

~ I like how they like scream abuse at each other, that’s kinda funny.

~ I like how a tribute is killed before the games.

~ I like how her dream is like a sort of vision or premonition.

Negatives:

~ Some parts are a bit unrealistic, like how she completely forgot it was the reaping, even though it’s her first year.

~ I’m not sure I get some parts of it and it is confusing in parts.

~ It’s kind of unrealistic that the guy has a knife, they would be checked before they got on the train.

Conclusion:

I like some aspects of this but I find it a bit confusing and hard to get my head around parts of it. I like the idea for the Quell but I feel it could be written or explained better. I think some parts are unrealistic but they can be easily fixed in a quick edit. I think that this story is good and with editing it could be better.