Ice [Poem]

This is the first poem i have written, so it'll probably be a little bad and not make any sense. Sorry! Could you please leave a comment and tell me your HONEST opinion about it. Hope you like it.

Ice is smiling at you

Ice is laughing at you

The eyes stare right into yours

As it makes its way up the doors

The entire carpet is covered in white

Soon, its teeth will come and bite

The gnawing at your heart increases

As the world around you falls to pieces

Memories are slowly forgotten

And the heaps of bodies around you become rotten

Pungent smells suffocate your senses

As the ice climbs up and over your fences

Quickly, you shout, it’s getting nearer!

Abruptly, your senses become ever so clearer

Cold and sickness cling to the dead

All of their clothes are stained with red

Everywhere in the room, there is death

Still, the air is as a soft as a baby’s breath

A knife strikes at your leg and you fall

And desperately, you try to crawl

But it’s too late, the ice has got you

It pins you to the ground like super glue

Your eyes slowly start to close

As a numbing icicle forms on your nose

The icicles claw their way into a muscle

Diving deeply into thy skull with a hustle

They sparkle like a sea of stars

Yet, you know they will leave many scars

Thy lips moan and groan

As the ice pierces at your bone

Thy hands, numb and blue

Death, is most certainly going to pass through

The pain will always strike twice

As you lie there and pay the price

Paralyzed, you look up at your gravestone

Now realise, that you are forever alone

Lifeless flowers lay there, all precise

You have now become a statue of ice

You – the sacrifice

Shall now take this advice

Go, lay in your tomb

And start your life again, in a mother’s womb.