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Raymond was walking home using his usual shortcut way through the ally, he see's a women calling for help, the women was being tackled by a man wearing a mask, covering his face; Raymond ran over and tried to help that women...the man had a knife...while Raymond was defenseless, the man stabbed Raymond 4 times in the chest, he was murdered along with the women. Raymond is sent to heaven and god knows he did many deeds and wouldn't let a good person die like this. He grants him 3 months to find out that serial killer along with many powers to help him do so, if he does....Raymond can live again, if he doesn't he has to stay back. While on his quest Raymond sees a beautiful girl who owns a flower boutique and soon fall in love with her, but she doesn't know that he is half human, half-....
First chapter!!!!!!!
Raymond closed his office doors, he was working late tonight because his clients wanted the work to be done fast. It was 1:00 a.m. Raymond went home using his usual path...through an alley.
While he was walking he heard a scream of a women from a distance.
"SOMEONE PLEASE HELP ME!!! HELP ME PLEASE!!!" A strange women yelled.
Raymond went over to find a man covered with a mask attacking that women. Raymond was a weakling when he was little and because of this, he was often picked on when he was in school, Raymond's mom took him to a martial arts class, he got a black belt at age 17. He ran over to the women that was still screaming for help but since it was dark out, no one was around here to hear her cries. "LET HER GO!" Raymond screamed to the masked man. The man chuckled but didn't let go. Raymond went into his fighting position and knocked the man, the women went to his side when he asked her if she was ok.
"ARE YOU OK? GO HIDE OVER THERE WHILE I TRY TO...." Raymond was stabbed from the back when he was talking to the women.He turned around, breathless trying to fight the man off but he was losing too much blood and he collapsed...He was stabbed a couple more times in the chest before he was finally dead. The man took the women and stabbed her in the chest a couple times too. They were both dead and the murdered ran away when he heard someone coming.A drunkard was walking by the alley when he saw Raymond and that women. "Hey why you people sleeping here?" The drunkard said in a blurred voice and kicking Raymond. He kicked Raymond a few more times until he rubbed his eyes and realized that Ray was dead.
"Oh my god! SOMEONE IS DEAD! PLEASE COME SOMEONE IS DEAD!!!!"
The drunk but now sober man yelled but no one heard him. He took out his phone and dialed for the police.
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Up in Heaven, Ray's PoV
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"I opened my eyes and thought it was a dream, I remembered that last night I was stabbed by a killer but where am I? Why is it all white?? Am I dead??" I said and a strange voice talked to me.
"Yes Raymond, you are dead, unfortunatly you were killed by the most gruesome serial killer on the loose in Hong Kong" The voice said me.
I felt strange, I wondered if i'm in heaven.
"Who are you?" I said to the voice.
"I am god, and I know that you died for helping someone so I have decided to give you a chance to go back to Earth"
I was astounded! God?? I'm in heaven? Im DEAD?? I said to myself.
"What chance are you talking about?" I answered to "god".
"Since you sacrificed yourself to help someone and even if it didn't succeed, You did a good deed and I, as god will give you a chance to live."
"A chance to live? HOW?" I said a little bit excited.
"I will let you go down back to Earth, as both human and a ghost. I will give you 3 months, in these 3 months, if you find the murderer, I will let you live and become fully human, If in the 3 months and you failed to do so, you will be back in heaven and will never step back to Earth again, Don't worry I will give you special powers to aid you on your quest, Deal?" God explained to me.
I, of course said yes! who wouldn't want second chance to live!? "Ok DEAL!".
"Good! You, now you will go back and no one learned of your death exept the killer of course! BYE Raymond and good luck!" God said,
I tried to reply but in a flash of light I was at home on my bed. Was it a dream? Or did I really died? I was confused and thirsty, So I went to the fridge, I was reaching for the handle, but i didn't touch it yet, it suddenly opened! Was this one of the powers god gave me? I was confused and wanted to make sure. I walked over to a door but stayed 3 feet away from it, I reached out my hand and said open! To my surprise it opened! I really did die! I was freaked out but found it cool in a way,
Raymond was walking home using his usual shortcut way through the ally, he see's a women calling for help, the women was being tackled by a man wearing a mask, covering his face; Raymond ran over and tried to help that women...the man had a knife...while Raymond was defenseless, the man stabbed Raymond 4 times in the chest, he was murdered along with the women. Raymond is sent to heaven and god knows he did many deeds and wouldn't let a good person die like this. He grants him 3 months to find out that serial killer along with many powers to help him do so, if he does....Raymond can live again, if he doesn't he has to stay back. While on his quest Raymond sees a beautiful girl who owns a flower boutique and soon fall in love with her, but she doesn't know that he is half human, half-....
First chapter!!!!!!!
Raymond closed his office doors, he was working late tonight because his clients wanted the work to be done fast. It was 1:00 a.m. Raymond went home using his usual path...through an alley.
While he was walking he heard a scream of a women from a distance.
"SOMEONE PLEASE HELP ME!!! HELP ME PLEASE!!!" A strange women yelled.
Raymond went over to find a man covered with a mask attacking that women. Raymond was a weakling when he was little and because of this, he was often picked on when he was in school, Raymond's mom took him to a martial arts class, he got a black belt at age 17. He ran over to the women that was still screaming for help but since it was dark out, no one was around here to hear her cries. "LET HER GO!" Raymond screamed to the masked man. The man chuckled but didn't let go. Raymond went into his fighting position and knocked the man, the women went to his side when he asked her if she was ok.
"ARE YOU OK? GO HIDE OVER THERE WHILE I TRY TO...." Raymond was stabbed from the back when he was talking to the women.He turned around, breathless trying to fight the man off but he was losing too much blood and he collapsed...He was stabbed a couple more times in the chest before he was finally dead. The man took the women and stabbed her in the chest a couple times too. They were both dead and the murdered ran away when he heard someone coming.A drunkard was walking by the alley when he saw Raymond and that women. "Hey why you people sleeping here?" The drunkard said in a blurred voice and kicking Raymond. He kicked Raymond a few more times until he rubbed his eyes and realized that Ray was dead.
"Oh my god! SOMEONE IS DEAD! PLEASE COME SOMEONE IS DEAD!!!!"
The drunk but now sober man yelled but no one heard him. He took out his phone and dialed for the police.
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Up in Heaven, Ray's PoV
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"I opened my eyes and thought it was a dream, I remembered that last night I was stabbed by a killer but where am I? Why is it all white?? Am I dead??" I said and a strange voice talked to me.
"Yes Raymond, you are dead, unfortunatly you were killed by the most gruesome serial killer on the loose in Hong Kong" The voice said me.
I felt strange, I wondered if i'm in heaven.
"Who are you?" I said to the voice.
"I am god, and I know that you died for helping someone so I have decided to give you a chance to go back to Earth"
I was astounded! God?? I'm in heaven? Im DEAD?? I said to myself.
"What chance are you talking about?" I answered to "god".
"Since you sacrificed yourself to help someone and even if it didn't succeed, You did a good deed and I, as god will give you a chance to live."
"A chance to live? HOW?" I said a little bit excited.
"I will let you go down back to Earth, as both human and a ghost. I will give you 3 months, in these 3 months, if you find the murderer, I will let you live and become fully human, If in the 3 months and you failed to do so, you will be back in heaven and will never step back to Earth again, Don't worry I will give you special powers to aid you on your quest, Deal?" God explained to me.
I, of course said yes! who wouldn't want second chance to live!? "Ok DEAL!".
"Good! You, now you will go back and no one learned of your death exept the killer of course! BYE Raymond and good luck!" God said,
I tried to reply but in a flash of light I was at home on my bed. Was it a dream? Or did I really died? I was confused and thirsty, So I went to the fridge, I was reaching for the handle, but i didn't touch it yet, it suddenly opened! Was this one of the powers god gave me? I was confused and wanted to make sure. I walked over to a door but stayed 3 feet away from it, I reached out my hand and said open! To my surprise it opened! I really did die! I was freaked out but found it cool in a way,
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